Tristich Series

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Sixty year old cabinet hinge squeaks Pain as owner bends her knees A long relationship at its peak Cling wrap drops upon the floor Carpal tunnel lessened her grip Cabinet door hangs loose from core Stiff painful back slows grabbing wrap Lying upon unswept white tiles Angels hoover near as she collapsed

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Hilo Poet

Date: 2/23/2020 8:16:00 PM

The descriptiveness opens a foothold of words being realized throughout, from its stark beginning to its dramatic ending--it is a shining moment to be had--glad to have read this Sara, blessings and -- Aloha!~@wk

Sandra Adams

Date: 2/22/2020 8:42:00 AM

wow… I have never done this form and know nothing about it...but the picture you paint, your metaphor and wording is excellent...I could see this one unfolding... Great to see a new write from you...if for the contest, best wishes, though I think it would do rather well with the quality of the write! hugs, hope all is well!

Sara Kendrick
Date: 2/22/2020 4:41:00 PM

Sandra, Very old type of poetry form. I have written them before but had forgotten that I had. There are several ways of writing them according to sites on the internet. You can find one in the Bible(there are more than one though there) Psalms 104: 15. Thanks for dropping by. I did not know about a contest.