Tread Not On Her Dreams

Traipsing a hidden lane of their yesterdays.
Rocks and stones each with a name placed, of
Endearments as green grass thick with promise,
Adorn that nest of rapture in which the stars
Dance and the Moon dilate on their demand.

Nuances a figment only, unperturbed as to the
Onset of a cold stare flicked in an instant,
Tossed as inconsequential, a smile to hide by.

Oblivious to winds of peril she paved her way,
Nurturing a utopia, a road to Camelot up there.

Hurl to the rain promises of devotions jaded by
Emergence of aging where subtlety evaded rose
Replaced with facial erosions by rivers of time. 

Destroying fences with greener pastures, there
Restraints overwhelm his promises of youth
Everlasting  a poetic expression of love then,
As her dreams shattered by strong winds
Merging with his fears of passing youth.
Sharks thus preying on drifting canoes.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 5/8/2014 12:35:00 AM
I do so love poetry and with that I say it is great.
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Tiaua M Ioane
Date: 5/10/2014 8:06:00 AM
Dear Marla, I appreciate so much your visits and uplifting comments. See you soon my friend, Alofas. Tiaua.
Date: 3/25/2014 9:39:00 AM
I'm a fan of the acrostic form...like Mystic said its not easy..I love how you ended it with a powerful stanza..very touching piece of art portrayed here.
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Tiaua M Ioane
Date: 3/25/2014 12:02:00 PM
Thank you Pace for your visit and comment, this is my second attempt at acrostic, great encouragement having such critiques!! Lots of alofas deàr friend,Tiaua.
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