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For the Transmutation contest by Unseeking Seeker

Transmutation

“we woke up early one morn, ego shorn
it felt as though we were in form reborn
nodes within stirred, boundaries blurred
our head and heart, with love concurred”
(line of inquiry)

Tears fell upon a senseless blank page, as self-pride suppressed dark vents of rage. We become silent when words don't engage, until we are touched by verses from a sage. Some arrive as a mentor with a mystic gaze, save us from being misplaced in ego's maze. As silver serpent skin begins to shed, we learn to walk a path where the sincere tread. With poetic expression a tale adorned. In the early dawn ink's ego was torn. Quill's rebirth reflecting a radiant sunrise, evolved the mind to portray sapphire skies. An alchemist's heart spoke of love's sweet strings. A melody mutating like butterfly wings. Vanity cast away, as a cold heart warmed. A rhapsody of roses with white petals formed. Emotions weaved words through the veil of time, in a fusion of metrically composed rhyme. With each beat, a rhythm of stanzas poured. In the canvas of life a masterpiece concurred. In union, poetry whispers through the air, cosmic swirls only honest poets share. As ego dies, speech become a divine exchange. Souls ignite when toxic thoughts begins to change.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Xiang Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 8:03 PM
You capture deftly the transmutation of ego to poetry 'when toxic thoughts begin to change'. Your senseless blank page filled with your rhapsody is adorned with rose petals. I look forward to more of your poetry through the weft of your words. Bravo.
Sinha-Roy Avatar
December 17, 2023 at 10:02 PM
Congratulations on your win with an insightful poem.
Sharma  Avatar
December 16, 2023 at 6:16 AM
Dear Silent one, I can absolutely feel the depth of this poem as you've so beautifully described how the arrival of a person can change our perspective towards life, bringing a transformation in our souls and letting us embrace ourselves without the manipulation of our ego.. Very true, ego can hinder our speach and the hearts tend to bleed in toxicity rather than swirling in creative aura.. Your descriptions are so profound here with those amazing imageries and impeccable wordplay! Brilliant!
Herrick Avatar
December 15, 2023 at 4:56 PM
I can even visualize this as a couple going to counseling and given advice to get "away a while" just the two on vacation where they reconnect to Life as it ought to be.
Pandit Avatar
December 15, 2023 at 12:14 PM
A powerful discourse on path that leads to transmutation, SO. As ego dies, speech become a divine exchange. Souls ignite when toxic thoughts begins to change--words that inspire and enlighten!
Empress Avatar
December 15, 2023 at 7:54 AM
Wow your take on this is so unique and so seamless with brilliant rhymes and flow of exquisite words and profound emotions and thoughts, you’ve conveyed them so very well here especially i love how you’ve written about how some of us are saved by a beautiful soul back to light from darkness, letting ego disappear through veil of time. I love so many lines in this but also the depth of every stanza really left me in awe captivated and resonating so strongly. I love especially “ An alchemist' —
Empress Avatar
December 15, 2023 at 7:55 AM
I love the seamless alliterations there so smooth and beautiful and so soulful! “ With poetic expression a tale adorned. In the early dawn ink's ego was torn. Quill's rebirth reflecting a radiant sunrise,“ wow love that and also the ending is beyond impeccable! Definitely a fave for me . Best wishes for the contest
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