Don Johnson Poet Triolet

Track Sitter

Track sitting
Sitting on the railway track,
But the train has come and gone.
Blind with pain of my sore back, 
Sitting on the railway track,
Feeling taut but maybe slack,
Hurtful feelings now begone,
Sitting on the railway track,
But the train has come and gone.

Don Johnson 5-aug-11

nette onclaud
Contest Name	IN THE AFTERGLOW

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Carol Sunshine Brown August 15, 2011 at 10:44 AM Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Nette's "In The Afterglow" contest Don. Love, Carol

Nancy Jones August 14, 2011 at 8:12 PM hearin' the mournful whistle... very nice write, Don Johnson!

John Freeman August 14, 2011 at 5:47 PM Don, a cool take on the photo, Great to see your poem doing well in Nette's contest. Congratulations on your worthy poem's place. Agape, Moses

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 14, 2011 at 4:33 PM Congrats DON on your super seventh place in Nette's contest with this excellent entry luv...

Robert A. Dufresne August 5, 2011 at 3:06 PM very interesting Don. fills the imagination with wondering and story making on it's own. coming from the shack with a sack o'er ma back sittin on the tracks ain't knowin where I'm at..... : )

Zzzzz Zzzzz August 5, 2011 at 1:37 PM Reminds me of the Warren Zevon song, "Poor, Poor Pityful Me." The trains no longer ran on that track. Imaginative interpretation of the picture, Don! Good luck in the contest. Robert.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 5, 2011 at 11:15 AM well u took the photo to another level of write DON and hopefully tragedy was averted luv.. good luck in the contest.. where is Z these days ..I miss him but s.m. is still kaput..oh..

Russell Sivey August 5, 2011 at 2:12 AM I sometimes find myself sitting on the railway track...what a risk that is!

Doris Culverhouse August 4, 2011 at 11:53 PM Well alls I know is get off the track before the train comes back!! ;} philosophical tonight?? Doris Culverhouse August 4, 2011 at 11:54 PM train don't run round hea' no mo'.