Toy

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Written on May 1st, 2025 for Oliver Mckeithan's Acrostic Agility Poetry Contest

Tarnished, cracked, and parched without your love. Oh, why hast thou forsaken my devotion? Your impulsivity led to my demise, accumulating dust among disused collections.

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Bernard F. Asuncion

Date: 5/29/2025 11:19:00 PM

This is a very powerful and emotionally charged piece of writing, expressing deep feelings of abandonment and betrayal. It's concise yet manages to convey a strong sense of hurt and neglect. It powerfully conveys feelings of heartbreak, worthlessness, and confusion in the face of perceived betrayal. There's a strong sense of unrequited devotion and the pain of being casually cast aside. Overall, this is a very impactful expression of deep emotional pain caused by a broken connection.

thriveni c mysore

Date: 5/4/2025 10:51:00 PM

unique write. Congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!

Sara Jama
Date: 5/8/2025 4:48:00 AM

Thank you so much.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/4/2025 10:23:00 AM

- Congratulations on your Acrostic poem " Toy" in the contest, Sara :) - hugs

Sara Jama
Date: 5/8/2025 4:47:00 AM

Thank you very much.