Totems In the Sky

Totems in the sky, they deaden the night
Barricading the stars, no sign of light
Clouds of grey, quickly bringing dismay
A message from above; will this be the day
I pray for the sun to chase them away
I beg them to leave, but they chose to stay
Moving sluggishly, so slowly, they terrify me
I’ve pondered their gloom, the pure mystery
What lies behind them, what lies within?
Do they carry iniquities, are they wrapped in our sin
They unease my soul; frighten me to the bone
Perhaps their true meaning will forever be unknown

Chiquita Baity
August 14, 2011

Contest Name Totems in the Darkening Sky 
Sponsor Francine Roberts

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Anthony Barrow

Date: 9/6/2011 6:20:00 PM

Just wanted to say hi to one of my favorite poets. Hope life always brings you joy and peace. May God bless you always and forever

Don Johnson

Date: 8/21/2011 7:06:00 PM

The frightening totems, with the spirits nigh, bit unnerving dunno why ...great poetry babe, xo, Don

Charles Melody Lightning Ink

Date: 8/17/2011 10:59:00 AM

no challenge, no skin pain, this poem is O.K.

Chiquitachiamaka Baity
Date: 8/19/2011 2:55:00 AM

thanks Melody Maker....smiles

Nick Bagnall

Date: 8/17/2011 7:34:00 AM

That was brilliant, right until the missed rhyme at the end, loved the topic, enjoyed the rhymes, threw away perfection at the end (though I admit I can;t think of anyway to re-word it and keep the same meaning, which is very good too).

Tim B

Date: 8/15/2011 8:40:00 PM

A foreboding yet inquisitive piece of poetry, a great write Chiquita! I love the line 'Do they carry iniquities, are they wrapped in our sin', a puzzle no doubt! Good luck in the contest!