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Too Late

Too late Charlie realized she should have listened to the internal voice that had been yelling “NO!” when the large black truck stopped for them. She knew it was now too late to get out, too late to run, too late to do anything…. She saw the glow of the devil’s eyes in the dark, and she knew this was the end. He was handsome, and there was no diabolical laugh, but she knew. Her heart was beating six beats a second too hard. Almost the second he had hit those door locks she knew they were goners. Why had she followed her cousin Dolly into this guy’s truck? Oblivious to the danger, Dolly in the middle, chattering nonsense. Her persistent run-on sentences were filling up every second of silence Char could feel the tension, and knew the monster was exuding anger. Dolly’s constant blathering was not helping. Char said she had to go to the bathroom and asked if he would unlock the door. This is when she heard the laugh, and the chatter stopped.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021




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Date: 9/1/2021 7:24:00 PM
Too much of this happens, it's very frightening.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/2/2021 6:19:00 AM
It is horrible
Date: 9/1/2021 11:58:00 AM
Such a chilling story, Caren, and you’ve told it so well! So many “too late” scenarios end this way in real life and I always think of those unsuspecting suckers and how awful that moment of realization must have been for them…
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/2/2021 6:19:00 AM
When I hear my internal voice I run off SCREAMING
Date: 9/1/2021 9:59:00 AM
Oh my! Who is Suzanne? I am afraid this happens all too often! I don't want to think of the ending.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/2/2021 6:20:00 AM
Suzanne is my REAL cousin who I based Dolly on! Thanks for pointing this out Hank. I totally missed it!
Date: 9/1/2021 7:00:00 AM
You have such a great talent.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/2/2021 6:20:00 AM
What a lovely thing to say! Thank you!

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