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Too

Written: May 19, 2024, For Hilo Poet Contest ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hear achoo Two sniffle snore kids germs flu stuffy nose, sore Ooze rush home clean to bore Nero burned Rome Outcried poems too built brass dome
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Kendrick Avatar
June 20, 2024 at 5:32 AM
Interesting way to go with this winner. Congratulations!! Way to go. Sara K
Rodrigues Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 4:39 PM
Congrats, Lasaad!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 9:49 AM
Sotto: A Nero write and the flu incite your timely quip, my friend. Aloha for your participation, William
George Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 7:07 PM
Loved the rhymes. Fewer words make the best of them. Cheers.
Kendrick Avatar
May 21, 2024 at 1:42 PM
I faintly remember when he did that. LOL..Thanks for sharing this one with us. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K
Greenhough Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 11:46 PM
Et tu, interesting thoughts. Clever with a bit of humor.
Beaufort Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 4:55 PM
SP, you're making me relate the flue with Rome on fire. Too funny really. Love it! Odd connections are often very inspiring
Buhagiar Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 11:44 AM
I see this is for the contest. Consider it free verse. Well composed. Great talent to write even short poems. Best for a win.
Rodgers Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 5:22 AM
Hello Sotto, What a clever and concise snapshot of the chaos of germs and flu season. The rhyming scheme adds a playful rhythm to the piece, and your ability to capture the essence of a common nuisance in such few words is truly impressive. Well done! Good Luck! - Blessings, Daniel
Pandit Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 5:03 AM
Very creatively done, my friend. You always write winners, Lasaad.
Empress Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 1:29 AM
Ah dr sotto is there any form or prompt that you cant do really! Youve done a very unique and clever take on this form, i havent really looked at the contest details yet but im sure you did it very well and delivered one that made me smile as i read the wordplay too! Especially the opening line is so clever! Hah! And the way youv used wordplay here is so fittinh for the theme that youv gone for! Excellent! Pleasure reading your work always! Best wishes for the contest! Keep shining
One Avatar
May 19, 2024 at 9:58 AM
I am not sure about this contest as I have not seen the poet give any examples, however, your arrangement of words seems very good... Best of luck in the contest...
Goldsmith Avatar
May 19, 2024 at 9:44 AM
I enjoyed reading your creative "TOO" write with a great picture. It was nice to see a short one this time. "Good Luck" Have A Blessed Day Writing Away..........
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