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This is a Gogyohka style or form poem

5 lines like a tanka but no syllable limit

each line is a complete phrase

To Me
to me your love looks inward you only serve yourself from where I sit, no one else is included even I am left out why did we marry

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Date: 4/2/2025 12:41:00 PM
- Sounds like a bad marriage, Oliver...great written - hugs
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Oliver Mckeithan
Date: 4/2/2025 1:07:00 PM
Thanks Anne-Lise. It is fictional for me and my wife anyway.
Date: 4/2/2025 10:43:00 AM
So very sad. The love needs to be recaptured…the little things matter.
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Oliver Mckeithan
Date: 4/2/2025 10:59:00 AM
They do matter but when one is focused on oneself it is hard. This is fictional by the way. Thanks Kim

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