Carolyn Devonshire Poet Triolet

Titanic Zeugma

The massive ship and hopes were lost
No lifeboats left for passengers
Their lips were blue, skin bit by frost
The massive ship and hopes were lost
Atlantic Ocean not yet crossed
The radar failed, no messengers
The massive ship and hopes were lost
No lifeboats left for passengers


*Written August 28, 2014 for Sara's "Zeugma" contest

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Sara Kendrick October 2, 2014 at 9:21 AM Thank you for participating in my contest..I am sorry to be so long in saying my congrats to each one..I enjoyed reading this one..Sara...I feel sad each time I think about what happened aboard that ship..

Brenda Meier-Hans September 22, 2014 at 12:18 PM Congratulations on your win Carolyn. Everything to do with the Titanic breaks my heart. Nice Zeugma, Triolet.

Dorian Petersen Potter September 12, 2014 at 10:20 AM Very intense triolet Carol! Love it! You just said in 8 straight lines of this nice triolet. No lifeboats enough anyway. Total negligence and discard of common sense! Such a tragedy that could have been I believe avoided. Best wishes! xxxx D.

Paul Callus September 1, 2014 at 9:20 AM Hi dear Carolyn! This is indeed a clever take on the zeugma contest; great triolet with a fitting topic to go with it. looking forward to seeing it on the winners' list. // paul Paul Callus September 22, 2014 at 10:44 AM ...congratulations...it is on the winners' list:)

Verlena S. Walker August 29, 2014 at 8:48 PM Nice write Carolyn for this contest. GL - Verlena

Daver Austin August 29, 2014 at 10:43 AM Bravo - remembering the tragedy. Luck in the contest. Zeugma! Wow! Out of my league. Love ya, daver

Tim Smith August 28, 2014 at 11:27 PM This fabulous my friend...I love how you always look to history to write about something..... Very well done....hugs Tim

Robert Lindley August 28, 2014 at 7:37 PM You did this form so well my friend. Surely a strong winner it will be!!!

Faye Gibson August 28, 2014 at 7:13 PM This is a great serious one, Carolyn. Captured the essence of the great disaster in a few short lines, perfect for the triolet form.

Shadow Hamilton August 28, 2014 at 6:20 PM well captured Carolyn gl in contest hugs

Carrie Richards August 28, 2014 at 5:58 PM Perfectly said......and the subject is unforgettable....after so many years, is still filled with so many stories! Well done in this Zeugma contest!

Jan Allison August 28, 2014 at 5:29 PM Wow Carolyn i love it - i can't get my head round this form you have done a great job. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx