Tide

The sea breathes Gently in and out, It seems to sigh upon the breeze. Waves sparkle Like liquid silver, Dappled diamonds on restless swell; Advancing Gently up the shore, Relentless, driven by the moon. Aromas Of rich dark seaweed, Distinctive halogenic nose. White egret In rock pool dipping While oystercatchers scream on by. Eternal tide, Pumping in and out Like measured concertina strokes. Mesmeric. I could watch for hours, Lost in timeless fascination.

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Kp Nunez

Date: 4/22/2015 6:16:00 AM

Loved this write set on my most favorite place. Beautiful. Can be a metaphor too. In itself though, it is already a very powerful image. A 7. PS. Maybe you'd like to double check the form for this?

Mike Jones
Date: 4/22/2015 9:35:00 AM

Thanks for your comment Kim. Regarding form, it is a variation on the Fibonacci which I have developed. It is a verse form with 3,5, 8 syllables in each verse (so the first 3 numbers in the series are omitted).