Thoughts

Years melted away like raindrops on soft white sand Thoughts are crushed I follow unknown tracks in my returning dreams Sadness has reached ma heart and paralizes my mind like wilting autum leaves falling from a leaden sky

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/23/2010 8:54:00 AM

Great prose too! Maybe line six has a typo. ma should be my?

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/4/2010 5:06:00 PM

Excellent descriptive write..I especially like the last two lines..Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara

Audrey Haick

Date: 4/4/2010 11:28:00 AM

My dear Gert, May whatever you're going through that has made you sad, I pray would pass and you'll return to a happier state of mind. A very happy and glorious Easter to you..Rejoice and be glad..for the Lord is risen..the debt is paid in full!! Love to you, your friend, audrey

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 4/4/2010 10:37:00 AM

sounds sad, yet beautiful. were sea urchins good to eat? are they like oysters?

Faleshia Murphy

Date: 4/4/2010 8:10:00 AM

hi gert thank you for your comments and have a happy easter faleshia

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/4/2010 8:06:00 AM

May our Lord bless you and yours on this Easter Day Gert. Love Carol and Family

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/4/2010 6:34:00 AM

Gret image of the years melting "like raindrops" on the sand as you follow the tracks. Very moving poem. Happy Easter, Carolyn

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/3/2010 11:14:00 AM

tender sad and touchin,here are some sunshine spells frm Malta.Happy Easter. .Charma

Faleshia Murphy

Date: 4/3/2010 9:49:00 AM

oh how sad keep strong you will be ok happy easter and thank you for your comments faleshia