Thou Art To Me a Delicious Torment-W

Once saw you freshly bathed, with glowing soft skin
And remember your hair with the stars and the moon
Grey-blue eyes piercing through my desiring heart a-cry
The greenest of things blue, the bluest of things grey

You fuller pouty lower lip alluring to my upper lip
I don’t need to get tips, as beautiful lips sink ship
I remember your look, making me quite nervous
Those eyes leaning, increasing my heart beats

Come in my garden, roses want to see you blossoming
The recesses of my heart needs to feel throbbing
Come, my mind wishes to feel intellectual touch
Come in dreams, I wish to confront reality as such.


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Fifth Place winner in

Contest: Sentimental Love Letters sponsored by Audrey carey
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Guzzi Avatar
March 19, 2011 at 6:36 AM
Hi there Ram do you want an "I"line 1 [Once I saw you?] You have 1 line showing internal rhyme, line 6 tips/lips/shipno end rhyme in 1,2 & 7,8 & two really nice half rhymes a-cry/grey, touch/such, perhaps a bit of polish? Light & Love
Dietrich Avatar
November 8, 2010 at 8:44 PM
wow, this is beautiful, Dr. Ram. Congats on your fifth place! Luv, Andrea
Vittozzi Avatar
November 8, 2010 at 5:58 PM
Great poem. Keep writing. Check my poems out when you get the chance. Thanks -Rob
Nandy Avatar
November 8, 2010 at 9:13 AM
Congratulations on your win Dr. Ram in Audrey's contest. So romantic , it's like a scene from the movies..Regards..Rinki
Mannan Avatar
November 8, 2010 at 5:02 AM
This is beautiful win. Many congratulations.
Brown Avatar
November 7, 2010 at 2:19 PM
Congratulations on your win Dr. Ram in Audrey's contest. Wishing you the best with your writing and winning in contests. Love, Carol
Sweetheart Avatar
November 7, 2010 at 8:01 AM
Congrats Dr. Ram my friend on your delicious win in the love letters contest with this excellent entry depicting luv... enjoy this happy Sunday with lots of luv..
Devonshire Avatar
November 7, 2010 at 7:53 AM
Congratulations on your win, Dr. Ram! Love, Carolyn
Kendrick Avatar
November 7, 2010 at 7:38 AM
THE CONTEST IS OVER AND YOU ARE THE WINNER..SARA
Villarosa Avatar
November 6, 2010 at 11:55 PM
This is a pleasant read, Dr. Ram. Congratulations on winning this contest. (^_^) Noel.
Neels Avatar
November 6, 2010 at 10:02 PM
Dr. Ram congratulations on your win in the contest ~ Wilma ;)
Onclaud Avatar
November 6, 2010 at 8:59 PM
great, flowing piece, dr.ram... cheers to your award, and thank you for wishing me as well. warmest, nette
Wellington Avatar
November 6, 2010 at 5:16 PM
Dr. Ram, thanks for your comments on my win with "A Sentimental Letter To My Only True Love", and congrats to you too. Luv always, Joy (Jew)
Haick Avatar
November 6, 2010 at 4:10 PM
Dr. Ram, I thank you for supporting my contest with this beautiful sensual piece of work. Someone needs to do a contest on Beautiful Sensual Poems.. Congratulations. Love, Audrey
Freeman Avatar
November 6, 2010 at 3:31 PM
Congratulations Dr Ram on your much deserved win in placement in the top ten. Agape, Moses
Dufresne Avatar
November 5, 2010 at 12:24 PM
What an excellent passionate poem, Dr Ram! Enjoyed it much. Well done......( sorry about the snow.in Detroit..I actually would not mind snow myself if the temp. stayed at a balmy 70 degrees or so all the while.) :)
Lee Avatar
November 4, 2010 at 10:15 AM
That be love as such... Joel
Knop Avatar
November 4, 2010 at 7:13 AM
I hope that you had a happy Dewali, Dr. Ram! Our Festival of Lights will be either Chanukkah or Christmas. I enjoyed the read of your so well written poem and wish you best success in Audrey's contest. Thank you also for your kind comments...and you look great on your photographs!...Gert
K. Avatar
November 4, 2010 at 2:06 AM
What a very sensual poem for your love, Dr. Ram-- you are definitely a romantic! best of luck in the contest :)-- nikko :)
Richards Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 6:06 PM
Passion just pours out of this delightful love poem....well done, Dr. Ram!!!
Maverick Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 12:48 PM
such a reality of dream discription & verse wow. very appreciated.
Rhinem Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 12:47 PM
Smile ~ "Ahh," the ebbs & flows of the sweetened tides of love "My Dear & Talented Friend, Dr. Ram Mehta!!!" ~ Although, this poe also seems to hold perhaps a metaphoric view also? Either or my friend, passionately & excellently presented sculptic piece of artistic clay so molded ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You & Yours," John! ~ Smile, "Have A Very 'Blessed & Beautiful' Day;" Bye!:) ~
Sweetheart Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 11:55 AM
Eloquent and truly romantic write Dr. Ram .. good luck in the contest my friend.. lovely descriptive lines embellish your title ... with luv..
Brown Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 10:51 AM
Thank you for posting your poetry that we may all enjoy it here at PoetrySoup Dr.Ram. Love, Carol
Devonshire Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 7:45 AM
She sounds like a very beautiful woman, Dr. Ram, and any lady would like to receive a love letter like the one you composed! I really like the way you describe how the roses wanted to see her blossoming. Quite a nice bit of irony there. Excellent entry for Audrey's contest and I wish you success. Soup mail returned. Love, Carolyn
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