Thirteen Syllables Or Less

thunderclouds shrouding the grave my falling tears 03~30~16 13 syllables or less contest sponsored by Timothy Hicks
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Gazbowski Avatar
April 14, 2016 at 9:31 PM
Beautifully written Jan.
Gazbowski Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 3:11 PM
OOPS ! And congrats too :-)
Allison Avatar
April 15, 2016 at 1:38 AM
Thanks Lenny:-) hugs Jan xx
Raven Avatar
April 4, 2016 at 9:26 PM
Hi Jan, last one tonight so thought i would look for another Haiku and i did find this excellent work. Firstly, Congratulations for your win in the contest. I do Love a well thought out Haiku, need i say more. It is enough to say this Haiku is going into my faves. Sometimes one can be lost for words and i do mean this in a good way, this is one of those times. Just excellent Jan. This is a definite seven. Loved this one. Hugs.... Mike. XX
Allison Avatar
April 5, 2016 at 2:04 AM
Thanks as ever for all your support Mike:-) hugs jan xx
Scars Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 12:24 PM
Jan, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
April 3, 2016 at 12:25 PM
Many thanks LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 7:59 PM
way to GOOOO. Big congrats.
Allison Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 8:06 PM
Thank you my friend:-) hugs jan xx
Haight Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 8:04 AM
Back to congratulate you on your win, Jan. Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 8:05 AM
Many thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
A. Sharma Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 2:18 AM
Yet another lovely win Jan.. big congrats!!
Allison Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 2:19 AM
Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 3:41 AM
This is wonderful Jan! Congratulations on your high placement! #7 ; )
Allison Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 5:14 AM
Thanks so much Connie:-) hugs Jan xx
Bhurani Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 3:22 AM
Emotionally thought provoking.....Congratulationd
Allison Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 5:14 AM
Thanks Rizwana:-) hugs Jan xx
Hicks Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 3:16 AM
Congrats Jan! Very impactful and sudden! I like how it is the tears that are falling as opposed to the rain ... really thoughtful choice of words.
Allison Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 3:18 AM
Many thanks Timothy:-) hugs Jan xx
Vaso Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 9:25 PM
That's so me!, get out of my grave! This is a fav for me and a7
Allison Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 2:07 AM
Your style is rubbing off on me and vice versa lol:-) hugs jan xx
Callus Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 4:58 PM
Yes...the lady has spread her wings! You have done well, Jan:) hugs // paul
Allison Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 4:59 PM
Many thanks Paul:-) I did get some advice on the ending of the poem:-) hugs jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 3:12 PM
you are getting great comments. Awesome, Jan!
Allison Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 3:19 PM
Thanks Andrea for all your support:-) hugs jan xx
Sankey- Lewis Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 2:38 PM
This is perfect adherence to shape of gem.
Allison Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 2:40 PM
Thanks so much Iris:-) hugs Jan xx
Scars Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 1:42 PM
Jan, perfect for the contest! I always struggle with haikus, but you mastered it, good luck! :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 2:06 PM
I admit I struggle too sometimes LuLoo and had a little help and advice with this one:-) hug jan xx
Selfa Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 9:44 AM
Great poem! Enjoyed all throughout. :) -HANS
Allison Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 10:20 AM
Thanks Hans:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 8:45 AM
your muse in her sad mode again Jan...There is a rainbow after the storm.
Allison Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 9:27 AM
I have no control over the stroppy mare - no matter how I feel I can write happy or sad :-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 7:36 AM
Powerful, deep, sad and excellent, Jan! Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 9:29 AM
Thanks Sandra my muse has been in sad mode over the last 2 days but I have no control over what she will come up with:-) hugs Jan xx
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