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THIRTEEN SYLLABLES OR LESS

thunderclouds shrouding the grave my falling tears 03~30~16 13 syllables or less contest sponsored by Timothy Hicks

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Date: 4/14/2016 9:31:00 PM
Beautifully written Jan.
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Lenny Gazbowski
Date: 4/15/2016 3:11:00 PM
OOPS ! And congrats too :-)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/15/2016 1:38:00 AM
Thanks Lenny:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/4/2016 9:26:00 PM
Hi Jan, last one tonight so thought i would look for another Haiku and i did find this excellent work. Firstly, Congratulations for your win in the contest. I do Love a well thought out Haiku, need i say more. It is enough to say this Haiku is going into my faves. Sometimes one can be lost for words and i do mean this in a good way, this is one of those times. Just excellent Jan. This is a definite seven. Loved this one. Hugs.... Mike. XX
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/5/2016 2:04:00 AM
Thanks as ever for all your support Mike:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/3/2016 12:24:00 PM
Jan, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/3/2016 12:25:00 PM
Many thanks LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/1/2016 7:59:00 PM
way to GOOOO. Big congrats.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/1/2016 8:06:00 PM
Thank you my friend:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/1/2016 8:04:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your win, Jan. Hugs, Sandra
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/1/2016 8:05:00 AM
Many thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/1/2016 2:18:00 AM
Yet another lovely win Jan.. big congrats!!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 4/1/2016 2:19:00 AM
Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 3/31/2016 3:41:00 AM
This is wonderful Jan! Congratulations on your high placement! #7 ; )
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/31/2016 5:14:00 AM
Thanks so much Connie:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/31/2016 3:22:00 AM
Emotionally thought provoking.....Congratulationd
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/31/2016 5:14:00 AM
Thanks Rizwana:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/31/2016 3:16:00 AM
Congrats Jan! Very impactful and sudden! I like how it is the tears that are falling as opposed to the rain ... really thoughtful choice of words.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/31/2016 3:18:00 AM
Many thanks Timothy:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 9:25:00 PM
That's so me!, get out of my grave! This is a fav for me and a7
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/31/2016 2:07:00 AM
Your style is rubbing off on me and vice versa lol:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 4:58:00 PM
Yes...the lady has spread her wings! You have done well, Jan:) hugs // paul
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/30/2016 4:59:00 PM
Many thanks Paul:-) I did get some advice on the ending of the poem:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 3:12:00 PM
you are getting great comments. Awesome, Jan!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/30/2016 3:19:00 PM
Thanks Andrea for all your support:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 2:38:00 PM
This is perfect adherence to shape of gem.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/30/2016 2:40:00 PM
Thanks so much Iris:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 1:42:00 PM
Jan, perfect for the contest! I always struggle with haikus, but you mastered it, good luck! :)-luloo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/30/2016 2:06:00 PM
I admit I struggle too sometimes LuLoo and had a little help and advice with this one:-) hug jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 9:44:00 AM
Great poem! Enjoyed all throughout. :) -HANS
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/30/2016 10:20:00 AM
Thanks Hans:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 8:45:00 AM
your muse in her sad mode again Jan...There is a rainbow after the storm.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/30/2016 9:27:00 AM
I have no control over the stroppy mare - no matter how I feel I can write happy or sad :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 3/30/2016 7:36:00 AM
Powerful, deep, sad and excellent, Jan! Hugs, Sandra
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 3/30/2016 9:29:00 AM
Thanks Sandra my muse has been in sad mode over the last 2 days but I have no control over what she will come up with:-) hugs Jan xx