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Thirteen Syllables Or Less

thunderclouds
shrouding the grave 
my falling tears

03~30~16
13 syllables or less contest sponsored by Timothy Hicks

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Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 4/14/2016 9:31:00 PM

Beautifully written Jan.

Lenny Gazbowski
Date: 4/15/2016 3:11:00 PM

OOPS ! And congrats too :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/15/2016 1:38:00 AM

Thanks Lenny:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 4/4/2016 9:26:00 PM

Hi Jan, last one tonight so thought i would look for another Haiku and i did find this excellent work. Firstly, Congratulations for your win in the contest. I do Love a well thought out Haiku, need i say more. It is enough to say this Haiku is going into my faves. Sometimes one can be lost for words and i do mean this in a good way, this is one of those times. Just excellent Jan. This is a definite seven. Loved this one. Hugs.... Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 4/5/2016 2:04:00 AM

Thanks as ever for all your support Mike:-) hugs jan xx

Beautiful Scars

Date: 4/3/2016 12:24:00 PM

Jan, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/3/2016 12:25:00 PM

Many thanks LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/1/2016 7:59:00 PM

way to GOOOO. Big congrats.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 8:06:00 PM

Thank you my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/1/2016 8:04:00 AM

Back to congratulate you on your win, Jan. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 8:05:00 AM

Many thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/1/2016 2:18:00 AM

Yet another lovely win Jan.. big congrats!!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2016 2:19:00 AM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) Hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/31/2016 3:41:00 AM

This is wonderful Jan! Congratulations on your high placement! #7 ; )

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 5:14:00 AM

Thanks so much Connie:-) hugs Jan xx

Rizwana Bhurani

Date: 3/31/2016 3:22:00 AM

Emotionally thought provoking.....Congratulationd

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 5:14:00 AM

Thanks Rizwana:-) hugs Jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/31/2016 3:16:00 AM

Congrats Jan! Very impactful and sudden! I like how it is the tears that are falling as opposed to the rain ... really thoughtful choice of words.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 3:18:00 AM

Many thanks Timothy:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/30/2016 9:25:00 PM

That's so me!, get out of my grave! This is a fav for me and a7

Jan Allison
Date: 3/31/2016 2:07:00 AM

Your style is rubbing off on me and vice versa lol:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 3/30/2016 4:58:00 PM

Yes...the lady has spread her wings! You have done well, Jan:) hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 4:59:00 PM

Many thanks Paul:-) I did get some advice on the ending of the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/30/2016 3:12:00 PM

you are getting great comments. Awesome, Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 3:19:00 PM

Thanks Andrea for all your support:-) hugs jan xx

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis

Date: 3/30/2016 2:38:00 PM

This is perfect adherence to shape of gem.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 2:40:00 PM

Thanks so much Iris:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars

Date: 3/30/2016 1:42:00 PM

Jan, perfect for the contest! I always struggle with haikus, but you mastered it, good luck! :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 2:06:00 PM

I admit I struggle too sometimes LuLoo and had a little help and advice with this one:-) hug jan xx

Hansteven Selfa

Date: 3/30/2016 9:44:00 AM

Great poem! Enjoyed all throughout. :) -HANS

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 10:20:00 AM

Thanks Hans:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 3/30/2016 8:45:00 AM

your muse in her sad mode again Jan...There is a rainbow after the storm.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 9:27:00 AM

I have no control over the stroppy mare - no matter how I feel I can write happy or sad :-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/30/2016 7:36:00 AM

Powerful, deep, sad and excellent, Jan! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2016 9:29:00 AM

Thanks Sandra my muse has been in sad mode over the last 2 days but I have no control over what she will come up with:-) hugs Jan xx

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