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Mawkishly I stand staring out the open door
     Listening to the falling fall rain
            Feeling the dampness penetrate
                Surround my old feeble body
                    Then
 
     The vision of the fall scene draws my eyes
            To the fallen leaves, curled, brown, wet
                  Lying upon the tan grass
                      Suffering from twenty days drought
                         Then

       I see the Ginkgo with its green leaves turning slightly 
             Yellow-tinged, so beautiful 
                 Soon they will be gold
                    Then fall to the ground and it will be
                              Winter

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J. I. Thomas F.

Date: 11/15/2023 8:17:00 PM

Very strong finish

Sara Kendrick
Date: 11/16/2023 4:33:00 AM

Yes, winter is a little bit strong but we all have to go through it, J.I. Your visit is uplifting. Sara K

Howard Kerr

Date: 11/15/2023 5:25:00 AM

Hi Sarah, First and foremost heartfelt thanks for your soupmail regarding my successful entry, Wee Small Hours, in a contest we both entered. Congratulations to you on your selection with this incisive work which captures every element of seasons in flux. Spellbinding descriptions of wet, colour, leaves, emotion to the fore. Howard

Sara Kendrick
Date: 11/15/2023 5:35:00 AM

Why, thank you, Howard. I appreciate the kind review of my work. I appreciate you taking time to read and comment on it. Sara K