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The Wall Between Us

Between us, there's a wall.
On my side, there's an empty hall,
Where I scream and cry.
Then I die, and die, and die.

I'm pleading on my knees,
Fighting the frosty breeze,
Begging for your aid,
Like a poor maid.

The wall seems so reasonably thin,
But you can't hear: "Let me in, let me in."
You just simply don't care,
Which is so awfully unfair.

Copyright © Anne Winter | Year Posted 2025

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Daniel Henry Rodgers Date: 3/26/2025 6:29:00 AM Dear Anne, I wanted to come back to see what new poems you have. My Sr Year in HS, I had an English teacher, Mrs. Dagenhart, who loved my poetry and I have been writing since. If I can be her to you in some small way because you have great potential. Now for this poem: Quite a powerful exploration of emotional barriers and unrequited connection. I loved your imagery of the wall and the empty hall because it captures the sense of isolation and desperation. Your words certainly show a haunting picture of vulnerability and longing, especially in lines like "Then I die, and die, and die." The contrast between the seemingly thin wall and the inability to breach it is particularly poignant. Your raw emotion shines through, creating a deeply moving piece. Excellent Keep Writing! Spring Blessings, my Dear Friend, Daniel Login to Reply Anne Winter Date: 3/26/2025 8:36:00 AM Dear Daniel, Thank you so much for your amazing review! I'm truly touched by your kind words and thoughtful analysis.I have to admit, I've struggled with self-doubt about my writing but your kind words and thoughtful feedback have helped me feel more confident of my work. I always write from the depth of my heart and I love writing. Thank you for seeing something in my writing that I wasn't sure was there. I loved hearing about your English teacher, Mrs. Dagenhart, and how she inspired you to write. Your offer to pay it forward and support me means a lot - I'd be grateful to have you as a mentor and friend! Your encouragement means everything to me. Thank you for believing in me and my writing. Spring Blessings to you too! Best regards, Anne