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The Unborn Sun

Blooming lavender lilac print, splashed on the hues of April tint; your sundress. Perky eyes curious spring face, will love old stories of the space at sundown. Bubbling life in taciturn swan, changing patterns shadowed upon sundial. Whispered lullabies melt around, resting on my lap dreaming sound till sunrise. Awaiting your sweet soothing muse, reviving kiss for morning blues my sunshine. May 13, 2020 Compounding The Verse Poetry Contest Sponsored By: Joseph May ~Winner: Second Place STRAND no 770 any theme any form Contest Sponsor: Brian Strand ~Winner: Second Place

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John Watt

Date: 11/10/2020 6:05:00 PM

I remember this contest, Aditi, but I'm surprised I never left you with a comment. I love the format/layout you applied, the lovely rhymes, and the five 'sun' compound words you came up with. I really feel the dreamy, peaceful, romantic vibe in this one. Peace ~ John

Edward Ibeh

Date: 5/25/2020 12:14:00 AM

Excellent piece, Aditi:-) Heartiest congratulations on your win. I love the layout of your poem as well!

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/25/2020 2:41:00 PM

Thank you so much for your kind words of appreciation Edward :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/24/2020 1:10:00 PM

Another beautiful creation from your talented pen Aditi! Congratulations on your marvelous Second placement! xxoo

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/24/2020 1:42:00 PM

Thank you so much Connie for your continuous words of appreciation and encouragement. Blessed :)

Joseph May

Date: 5/23/2020 7:35:00 PM

Wonderful write Aditi, Congrats on your win..

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/23/2020 7:40:00 PM

Thank you for appreciating and for the placement in your contest Joseph :)

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/23/2020 3:15:00 PM

Aditi, this is such a beautiful poem! CONGRATS on your win. Janice

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/23/2020 7:39:00 PM

Thank you for appreciating Janice :)

Mohan Chutani

Date: 5/13/2020 11:04:00 AM

Aditi, you make it flow so smooth, even this difficult form. GL. Mohan

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/13/2020 12:22:00 PM

Thank you for your generous review Mohan :)

Swetha Vangaveti

Date: 5/13/2020 11:01:00 AM

Beautifully crafted. An instant fave :)

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/13/2020 12:20:00 PM

So glad you loved it. Thank you Swetha :)

Jenish Somadas

Date: 5/13/2020 9:33:00 AM

Wow.. Beautifully penned.. I love your heading.. The Unborn Sun.. Good luck Aditi..

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/13/2020 9:36:00 AM

Thank you Jenish :) The poem revolves around the imaginations of that unborn sun, so I couldn't think of another title.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/13/2020 6:12:00 AM

Awesome, lovely verse you wrote, Aditi! Your description paints the arrival in colors of the morning, wonderfully--whispering to the reader. Well done. A winning poem you wrote.

Aditi Mishra
Date: 5/13/2020 7:32:00 AM

Thank you for your meaningful and kind review Vijay. :)