The Train Ride

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I feel so grand this special day in June
while waiting at the station for my ride
aboard the new steam engine coming soon
to take me to a place where I can hide

from city noise and busy city streets;
from smog-filled air and houses crowded so,
to countrysides with grassy fields of wheat
and clear blue skies where soft winds come and go.

Here comes the beauty, black, in clouds of steam;
she pulls beside the station; "All Aboard"
is called, and so I quickly run and dream
to settle down with suitcase neatly stored.

Click-clack of spinning wheels sounds like a song;
the gray steam lends the awe of mystery,
with cloud-like drifts that form and move along 
while taking me to somewhere wild and free.

With constant pace, the steam train grinds its wheels 
through mountain passes, narrow tunnels too.
The beauty of the valley, hills, and fields
soon takes my breath away; a wondrous view!

As on she chugs with clanging bell on top,
she sings a song of motion heading home-
that place down yonder where she'll make a stop;
my destination of new lands to roam.


January 21, 2015

~1st Place
Contest: Railroads, A Historical Glance Back
Sponsor: BJ Legros Kelley
Judged: 11/16/2021

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 11/16/2021 3:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place win in my contest Sandra! I am so blessed and honored that you submitted this beautiful work of absolute beauty. I had a lot of help through my family in judging this contest, it was one of the poems that had a first place vote from each of us! God bless you dear Sandra, and again, congratulations!
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Date: 11/16/2021 9:55:00 AM
Thank you so much, BJ, for your contest and my wonderful placement! I am so pleased that you like it. Actually, earlier this year, I gave permission to use it on a public poetry board on a railway platform in Altrincham, Greater Manchester, UK, which helps pass the time for commuters. I appreciate your nice comments and congratulations! Thanks again! Sandra
Date: 5/2/2016 1:41:00 AM
Congrats Sandra, what a vision you have painted
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Date: 5/1/2016 8:11:00 AM
Wonderful form and its thematic writing. Congrats on your top placement!
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Date: 5/1/2016 7:45:00 AM
Congratulations on your lovely win, dear Sandra!! This is so marvellous!! :) :)
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Date: 5/1/2016 12:21:00 AM
Sandra, I had forgotten this one yet still felt the rocking of the train, the click-clack of the iron wheels, the excitement of an escape. Congrats on your placement in the contest
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Date: 5/2/2016 5:05:00 PM
Thank you, John, for another great contest and for my nice placement in your Premier Contest. Sandra
Date: 2/1/2015 1:57:00 PM
SANDRA, CONGRATULATIONS on your RAILWAY JOURNEY win *ALWAYS* SKAT
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Date: 1/26/2015 5:12:00 PM
Well done Sandra, the huff and chug of the steam engine, the escape to a hide, the epitome of the railroad.
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Sandra Haight
Date: 1/27/2015 4:50:00 PM
Thank you, John. So nice of you to stop by with your positive comment! Sandra
Date: 1/26/2015 5:55:00 AM
Droppin back to wish congrats on your win
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Date: 1/27/2015 4:50:00 PM
Thank you, Nadiya. I really appreciate it. Sandra
Date: 1/25/2015 11:56:00 PM
Very suggestive picture with lovely take, congrats on the win
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Sandra Haight
Date: 1/27/2015 4:51:00 PM
Thank you, Dr. Ram. I really appreciate your stopping by with your nice comment and congratulations. Sandra
Date: 1/25/2015 7:03:00 PM
Hi Sandra, I rated your interesting and well structured creation a 7 just now. You could have and should have taken the #1 spot easily. Congratulations a your great win. Take care. Earl
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Date: 1/27/2015 4:53:00 PM
Earl, you are very sweet! Thanks so much for your positive remarks, congrats, and great support with a 7! I always appreciate your comments. Sandra
Date: 1/25/2015 3:38:00 PM
So descriptive a write Sandra many congrats a 7 from me:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/25/2015 3:54:00 PM
Jan, thank you so much. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 1/25/2015 1:50:00 PM
Sandra, love your descriptive story, congratulations on your win, and 7. Blessings eve
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Date: 1/25/2015 3:55:00 PM
Thank you so much, Eve. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 1/25/2015 1:38:00 PM
lovey poem Sandra congrats on placing 2nd hugs
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Date: 1/25/2015 3:57:00 PM
Thank you, Shadow. It was creating the poem. I enjoyed participating in your contest, and I appreciate my placement. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 1/23/2015 5:06:00 PM
Ahh!! Reads like an exciting time on the rails..Winner for sure..Way to go..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Sandra Haight
Date: 1/25/2015 6:40:00 AM
Thank you so much, Sara. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 1/23/2015 12:18:00 PM
I am sure you mentioned once that iambic pentameter comes natural to you when you write; this poem proves it! I love your train journey with all the imagery that it offers. In my eyes...a winner! #7 // paul
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Date: 1/25/2015 6:40:00 AM
Thank you, Paul. I so much appreciate your nice comments and support. Sandra
Date: 1/22/2015 11:23:00 PM
Your meter is so wonderfully precise, Sandra, just like the clickety clack of that train on its tracks.
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Date: 1/25/2015 6:41:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea. Hugs, Sandra
Date: 1/22/2015 12:08:00 PM
Beatiful pen Sandra... best wishes for the contest... lov,nad!
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Date: 1/22/2015 5:17:00 PM
Nadiya AR, thank you so much for stopping by with your nice comment and best wishes for the contest. I really appreciate it. Sandra
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