The sun goes down

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I looked for you one last time; as the sun went down I looked for you again; when I was about to run aground Was that my guiding star; it, was nowhere to be found In a sea of contention; you were never really around But even still, as I look for you; the sun goes down

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Paige Hind

Date: 11/24/2023 5:56:00 PM

Sounds like you''ll never truly let go...I enjoyed reading this, dear friend. :)

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 11/25/2023 12:43:00 AM

My devotion runs deep, once you make it into my circle I don't abandon you. Unless you choose to abandon me. Devotedly A.S.

Panagiota Romios

Date: 11/22/2023 6:04:00 PM

Hi dearest friend, I am aware of this feeling! The rhyme expresses the feeling quite well, it’s almost akin to a blues song. Oh. I love the music of Cole Porter and his music gives me goosebumps.. the lyrics capture sadness love joy, the whole span of human emotion. Alas, I don’t play the panel and I’m not Cole Porter,.))) You remind me of Cole Porter but as poet.very cool. Pangie xx

Anonomus Scorpio
Date: 11/22/2023 6:51:00 PM

;) i too enjoy Cole among many many other talented artists. It is very keen of you to recognize that music influences my poetry....I have a big smile right now.... I love when people understand me even if they don't know they do lol..... appreciating you seeing me.... A.S.