Maria Williams Poet Rhyme

The Ship In a Bottle - POTD

POTD 6 Mar 2020

Oh, where are those waves
of bygone days
that caressed and rocked
on hearing you cry?
‘Sleep little ship’ I'd murmur low
while ocean crooned her soft lullaby

Turbulent change wrought by tempestuous winds
Fresh cravings to taste the salted breeze
In foam and spray twixt the now lashing waves
Illusions waft to tempt and tease

Resounding thunder heralds a storm
Streaks of lightning split the skies
Your torch burning bright to take the helm
for selfish reasons my love denies

Indecisions vacillate crucial visions
cavernous chasms far withdrawn
The deeper I think the lower I sink
The wind howls forth a cry forlorn

No delusion with love ~ high the price
In this icy realm my resistance will take
a solicitous change of a Mother’s heart
Look not the shattered glass in your wake
  
The impulses of the over protective mother and keeping her child sheltered in a bubble away from the real world is just not feasible anymore. The ‘Breaking Point’ is, when she must weigh up her own feelings - either relinquishing her relationship with her offspring by forcing it to stay, or breaking her heart if she lets it go. 
Ultimately, as in the ‘Story of Life’…. Love conquers all.
~Happy International Women's Day to those celebrating on Sunday 8th ~

<POTD 6 Mar 2020

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Akkina Downing November 5, 2020 at 5:25 AM When I was a little girl, someone gifted my mom a bottle that had a ship in it. It confused the heck outta me how it got in there. I would so tenderly touched it and wondered if God punished the captain and shoved him and his ship in the bottle... Lol! Anyways, this so thoughtful and inspiring. A mother’s love is unconditional she’d do anything for her baby! As always, magnificent poem. I loved it :)

Freddie Robinson Jr. July 25, 2020 at 9:25 AM Beautiful poem of genetically yielding to the firmament forces of replicated liberty, Maria. May love light the path of your sabbatical journey. Long may you live and prosper. Love and more love always.

Gregory Richard Barden June 21, 2020 at 4:32 AM (I pray you return to the Soup and share more of your talent with us, Maria - and I hope, wherever you are, that you are still writing. Blessings)

Gregory Richard Barden June 21, 2020 at 4:28 AM This is gorgeous, Maria ... I was a single dad, and while I can never know the innate connection a mother has to her birthed ones, (a connection that goes far beyond words, I imagine), I can relate to this lovely poem, and the urge to shelter your wee ones. There comes a point when we have to let go and let them soar, watch them stumble, help them up (if we can), and how torturous that period is! Mine are all in their 30's now, but my eyes moisten whenever I watch them drive away. Superb write!

Carole Duet June 20, 2020 at 2:33 PM Such a poignant and true-to-life poem, Maria. It is hard to let the little 'birds' flee the nest but we must do it with pride and love not selfishness and weakness. To be a good mother a woman has to be strong. A belated congratulations on POTD too. FAVED! P.S. And, I love the song...perfect choice!

Paul Callus June 2, 2020 at 4:26 PM This is metaphorically striking, Maria. Like any other loving mother you have fears and doubts with regards to children. You want the best, while doing your utmost to protect...something that comes naturally. Yet, deep down, there is the knowledge that eventually birds will leave the nest and learn to fly on their own. // Belated congrats on p.o.t.d. ~ Warm regards // paul

Pashang Salehi April 7, 2020 at 8:49 PM By the way congratulations on POTD... WELL deserved... Maria Williams April 16, 2020 at 12:54 AM Thanks, so appreciate it....Maria Hugs

Pashang Salehi April 7, 2020 at 8:47 PM Dear Maria, I read your poem and I read your explanation. My interpretation is completely different; first, I loved it, second, it shows " Our lives" we are all in a bottle or in a cage and we're all asleep, and as you said the world creates a salted breeze. "The deeper I think the lower I sink". Magnificent... it's the story of my life. Maria Williams April 16, 2020 at 12:54 AM Hi Pashang, so lovely to see you. Its interesting that you see it in a different way. I guess its open to interpretation. How are you going? Please take care and stay safe my friend. Thanks for the visit....Maria Hugs

Connie Marcum Wong March 30, 2020 at 6:08 PM Congratulations on POTD Maria. This is A beautiful moving piece that touches my heart because I had to let go of all my children and now they are all living far away. Losing my granddaughter hurts the most because I watched her for seven years. Now I look forward to FaceTime. Keep safe my lovely friend. xxoo Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:33 AM Dear Connie, I know exactly what you must be feeling. She was so much a part of your life. Even though we are all going through a very bad time at the moment, the tide must turn,and she will visit or you can very soon. Thanks for the visit and support always, you and your family keep safe my dear sweet friend....Maria Hugs

Jc Hawkens March 30, 2020 at 1:36 PM Thank you Maria, for such a beautifully written poem. Penned so well with such wonderful allegory. Congratulations on your well earned POTD. JC Hawkens Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:51 AM Thanks JC, so glad you liked it. I appreciate your visit and lovely comment....Maria Hugs

Eve Roper March 29, 2020 at 5:03 PM Lovely, Maria. Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:50 AM Thank you Eve, so glad you liked it. Thanks for the visit and comment. Truly appreciated ....Maria Hugs

Geoffrey Brewer March 28, 2020 at 6:10 AM An effective allegory, described with your usual rich and sensual vocabulary, giving touching effect. Well done Maria. Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:48 AM Coming from a brilliant poet such as yourself I am deeply honoured Geoffrey. So glad you liked it. Thanks for the visit. Hope you are all keeping well? Stay positive and stay safe....Maria Hugs

Francis Brown March 23, 2020 at 8:56 AM I love! Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:46 AM Thank you Francis, so glad you did. Appreciated....Maria Hugs

Susan Ashley March 18, 2020 at 8:18 PM My dear, sweet, Maria, your soulful artistry knows no bounds and never ceases to astound me! A heartfelt poem baring a vulnerability, baring the heart and soul of a loving mother. Your extraordinary imagery and amazing phrasing; 'The deeper I think the lower I sink' (so true of a mother's worry) combine to make this poem a metaphoric beauty. Belated congratulations on your very worthy honor of POTD, dear poetess. Warmest wishes always, my dear friend and sister.. ~Susan Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:42 AM Thank you my dearest Susan, what a delight to see you. I truly appreciate your visit and support always my dear sweet friend. Stay positive and stay safe. Love to you and your family...Maria Hugs

Demetrios Trifiatis March 8, 2020 at 5:34 PM Back to congratulate you my dearest! I was the first to comment on your marvelous poem and the first to Fav it but I hope not to be the last to do so! I am so happy that my judgment was also shared by others. God bless you! Hugs xxx Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:38 AM Thank you my dearest Demetrios, I truly appreciate your visit, faves and support always my sweet friend....Maria Love and Hugs

Besma Riabi Dziri March 8, 2020 at 4:12 PM "The deeper I think the lower I sink"! Diving into a heart of a mother as plunging into an ocean! A whole world of possibilities.. of wealth.. of unpredictability.. I deeply feel you in such a stunning and heartfelt confidence.. Dearest Maria, congratulations on your POTD honour! A great poetess with the heart of a mother and the beauty of a woman acknowledged and recognised for your artistry, insight and compassion! Happy Woman's Day! Blessings to you. Love and hugs. Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:37 AM Thanks Besma, I truly appreciate your visit and support always my dear sweet friend....Maria Love and Hugs

Charles Messina March 8, 2020 at 8:37 AM So beautiful, Maria. Exceptional poetry my dear friend. Great to see this POTD honors. Congratulations! Hugs Charlie Maria Williams April 1, 2020 at 6:35 AM Thanks Charlie, I truly appreciate your visit and support always my friend....Maria Hugs

Line Gauthier March 7, 2020 at 5:27 PM Congrats on your POTD, Maria. A pleasure to read your poem today. Maria Williams March 8, 2020 at 4:57 AM Thanks Line, I truly appreciate your visit and comments always....Maria Hugs

John Watt March 6, 2020 at 10:58 PM Maria, a very honest and vulnerable write. Letting go can be so hard. Love the maritime imagery - so appropriate for the storms of life we weather as parents and offspring. Well done, congrats on POTD ~ John Maria Williams March 7, 2020 at 12:44 AM Thanks so much John, glad you liked it. You are so right, feelings were vulnerable and bare in all honesty. Thanks for stopping by, truly appreciated ....Maria Hugs

Connie Marcum Wong March 6, 2020 at 9:59 PM This is incredibly beautiful Maria. Congratulations on your deserving honor of POTD! xxoo Maria Williams March 7, 2020 at 12:42 AM Thanks so much Connie, so glad to see you. I hope you are well? I was in your beloved Hawaii about a month ago, strictly business this time. The weather was beautiful, I can see why you love it there so much. Thanks for your visit and comment, appreciate it as always....Maria Hugs

Carole Duet March 6, 2020 at 7:48 PM What a wonderful write, Maria. Deeply moving as it reminds me of my own life with memories of a mother's sacrifice for the love of her children. A perfect Mother's Day poem! Maria Williams March 6, 2020 at 9:43 PM How lovely to see you here again Carole my sweet friend. I've missed you, and I'm sure many others have too. Yes, we mother's will always know the meaning of the word sacrifice. Goes with the territory I guess. Thanks for the visit and lovely comments always my dear.....Maria Hugs

Sheri Evans March 6, 2020 at 7:48 PM Wow. very well thought out and variety of word makes it seem as old as the struggle. I really like this. Maria Williams March 6, 2020 at 10:09 PM I'm glad you like it Sherri. Thank you for the visit and comment. Appreciate it....Maria Hugs

Paula Goldsmith March 6, 2020 at 5:59 PM Congratulations on your POTD. A wonderful write. A mother's job is not easy. Have a great weekend........ Maria Williams March 7, 2020 at 12:38 AM Thanks so much Paula, so glad you liked this. Indeed a Mothers job is never easy. Thanks for stopping by... Maria Hugs

Silent One March 6, 2020 at 2:31 PM A ship is safe in a bottle, but it does not belong there... A philosophical way to look at it through an amazing poem... It is international women's Day on 8 March so this is fitting for that. Also congrats on POTD. Silent One March 7, 2020 at 11:37 AM Maybe you smashed la pinta... Maria Williams March 7, 2020 at 12:37 AM Thanks Si, as you know you inspired this poem. The La Nina and Santa Maria still take pride of place. Not sure what happened to La Pinta. I think he burst out of captivity :) Thanks my amazing friend. I appreciate your loving support. Glad you liked this....Maria Hugs

Warren Doll March 6, 2020 at 2:18 PM "No delusion with love ~ high the price" Never a truer line written. Congratulations on POTD, Maria. Warmest Wishes~ Warren Maria Williams March 6, 2020 at 9:53 PM Thanks so much Warren, so glad you liked this one. That line means a lot to me as well. Good to see you....Maria Hugs

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