The Seasoned Commuter

The Seasoned Commuter

On The platform for ten to seven
No more trains if I get to heaven
Coffee and paper held in each hand
Bought a new ticket, cost me four grand!
The train is on time, not running late
I need three hands or maybe a plate?
I’m near the front so should get a seat
I hate to stand, packed in like meat.
Here comes the train it seems so slow
But it’s just the start of my daily woe.
The doors fly open and in I rush
A dig in the ribs and a poke in the mush!
Just keep going, just hope and pray
I want my seat for the money I pay
Made it, got it, next to Tim
Bit of a squeeze but he’s not so grim
An hour and ten if we run to time
And I’m going nowhere, this seat is mine!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 2/21/2016 8:24:00 AM
What a commute huh, great write Roger.
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Date: 2/17/2016 6:45:00 PM
Roger: I'm retired but where I live a long commute is 15-20 minutes in the family car. I probably found this entertaining because I never had to do it. :o) oldbuck
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Date: 2/3/2016 10:28:00 AM
Good one. I can relate. A well written couplet sequence.
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Date: 7/10/2010 2:35:00 PM
Hehe, now I'm glad I don't need to travel by train to work Roger, but I miss using the train, love Wilma x
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Date: 6/23/2010 7:09:00 PM
funny, enjoyed, I am glad I don't have to ride the train.
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Date: 6/14/2010 2:32:00 PM
like this:)
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Date: 6/14/2010 10:45:00 AM
A very witty description of the hustle and bustle of commuters rushing to the office. Yipes, when ticket prices hit four grand, I'll be riding with the hobos in back cars on the train. Great work, Roger! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 6/13/2010 10:14:00 PM
What a nightmare! I have clausterphobia on trains. Great read from your mighty pen, Sir Roger.
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Date: 6/13/2010 9:58:00 PM
Sorry, I meant The Long night not Recompense. I enjoyed this poem Roger. Aloha, Connie Soup mail
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Date: 6/13/2010 5:33:00 AM
ha ha, I don't blame you, hold onto that seat!! Enjoyed this taste of your morning commute ~ Sharon :)
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Date: 6/12/2010 11:56:00 PM
A good funny!! LUv, andrea
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Date: 6/12/2010 7:45:00 AM
I just enjoyed this poem,like your style in poetry, Roger!Celene!
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Date: 6/12/2010 6:38:00 AM
I enjoyed the the seasoned commuter.
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