Debbie Guzzi Poet Verse

The Scent of Water

From the salted sea we came to air
the brine brought us in from fins.
One single cell divided then united 
as in the heavens; we came from Him.

Being without consciousness unaware
the sea water brought us in,
then united one single cell divided
birthing others all of Him, akin.

The sea fronds in the shallows ensnare
earthen, tendrils to begin;
one single cell divided  then united 
bringing plants to those in earthly skin.

Out and up into the pristine air
from the ocean water spins
then united one single cell divided
bringing rain clouds full of light and din.

So up and down and round and round here
parts of Himself spin and grin
one single cell divided  then united 
so the scent of water came from Him.



ZaniLa Rhyme


7/17/14
See About the poem _ I did it correctly this time ;) nope I didn't
corrected with Faye's help!

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Suburban Lovechild February 23, 2015 at 11:12 PM Beautiful depiction, all the ingredients that make up the scent, great job. I'm new to many of the different formal poem forms, how does the third line anchor what you constructed here?

Maurice Yvonne September 26, 2014 at 7:15 PM This is an amazing write Debbie, a great example of verse. I will fav and study. I need so much work on form. I am brand spanking new at this.

Kelly Deschler July 19, 2014 at 1:19 AM To be the first to rise above the surface and discover a new and better way of life, and existence would be so wonderful... divided then united!.... This is an interesting and beautiful poem, Debbie. I enjoyed it! Good luck in the contest!.... Thank you so much for the wonderful comments. They really meant a lot!

Jack Horne July 18, 2014 at 2:54 PM very clever write here, debs x

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 18, 2014 at 2:50 AM Thoughtful write Debbie! Ah the theory of evolution,, u cud science into poetry so well,, gl in contest !

Hija De La Luna July 17, 2014 at 9:11 PM The miracle of life! Love it! :) - Maria

Frederic Parker July 17, 2014 at 5:48 PM a more scientific approach to the contest, an interesting way to go, well done by the way..but interesting..good luck and wish you well..

John Lawless July 17, 2014 at 5:04 PM Ah, yes, Debbie, the one celled amoeba take on the theme. Interesting take on the theme.