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The Rose

Once bloomed a rose so young and fair With dark brown eyes and long black hair Beside her be a tall dark tree Whose branches stretch to smother thee Too close beside the shadowy bark That soon begins to leave its mark She cries for help, but none shall hear Her thorns too sharp, who’d dare go near? To save this rose, who’d risk their life? With naught to gain but pain and strife Alone, afraid, she lays to rest Her heart beats low inside her chest And with the hour growing near She sheds her final grieving tear And so the rose soon falls asunder Her final day, eternal slumber She lies beside the old dark tree The only one who mourns for thee

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 3/20/2011 3:35:00 PM
great write, but you spelled mourn wrong. Not to be harsh here but you might get docked for that in the contest. congrats too for making it to the first round.
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Nina Hernandez
Date: 7/6/2012 3:45:00 PM
Thanks for catching that, I do believe its fixed. (^_^)
Date: 3/9/2011 10:53:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through round one of PoetrySoup's contest. The best to you in the finals Nina. Love Carol
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Nina Hernandez
Date: 7/6/2012 3:43:00 PM
Thank you Carol (^_^)
Date: 12/7/2010 9:14:00 AM
Congratulations Nina on your excellent poetry being featured this week on PoetrySoup. May you have many more features. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/6/2010 10:23:00 PM
Congrats on your poem being featured Nina!
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Nina Hernandez
Date: 7/6/2012 3:43:00 PM
Thank sis love you!
Date: 11/16/2010 9:13:00 AM
Hello Nina, Beautiful and so well written. So glad I happened to stop by. Hope your week is wonderful and full of love and inspiration. As Always, Shar
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Nina Hernandez
Date: 7/6/2012 3:42:00 PM
Thank you so very much Sharon (^__^)
Date: 11/16/2010 5:09:00 AM
Powerful
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Nina Hernandez
Date: 7/6/2012 3:44:00 PM
Thank you very much Erica (^_^)