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The Road To Your House

Traced backwards through dreams gone— Saw a cobblestone path creasing palm of land Slowly, images ripened beneath memory’s dawn Faded, pattering feet stroking stone into sand. 2010.10. NOTICE: I'd like hard-core critiques, please!

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Date: 11/20/2017 4:11:00 PM
This is a great little poem, I only wish for more.
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Date: 11/20/2017 11:44:00 AM
Hard core critique from someone who adores your poetry, I would have just made it longer, I love nostalgic toned words and you had me strolling down memory lane with you, then it was over, maybe that's the point, well done! Just write more, that's my critique, I love reading it.
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Date: 1/3/2016 6:43:00 PM
Grace, a pleasure to read your poem. Have a great day. SKAT ,
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Date: 9/15/2011 4:19:00 AM
hehehhe! Grace, all i can say is that i enjoyed your deep and rough way of words... have a good one,..p.d.
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Date: 6/11/2011 7:19:00 PM
Grace,I see you have been gone from Soup for a long time now. I am revisiting people on my fave list and wondering what happened with you. I see you left a beautiful poem at the end here. You wanted hard core critique. All I can say is that I love how it sounds. The one word I was not too crazy about was "stroking" since I don't think of feet as doing a stroking motion. the other lines I LOVE.
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Date: 11/6/2010 4:17:00 PM
Hi Grace.I find sometimes poets create something personal to them.And it is not always necessary to understand what is on their mind to recognise someone is capable of writing good poetry.If we the reader get something from it.If it arouses emotion,evokes memories,touches us in some way as this does it gives us pleasure.This is not nonesense it is a conveyance of your thoughts and feelings and contains it's own beauty that I can see and appreciate and it gives me pleasure to read it.Love June(S)
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Date: 10/29/2010 12:30:00 PM
Thank you for posting your excellent poetry here at PoetrySoup so we all may read it Grace. May your weekend be one of much joy to you and may it bring inspiration to the end of your pen. Wishing you the best in any contestd you have entered or are going to enter this weekend. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/29/2010 5:01:00 AM
Yes, you have penned good images to describe the path, Grace
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