The Renegade

A renegade came in on his horse from the west
With spurs on his boots and a fringe on his vest;
The tilt of his hat was folly's own heat
And his engraved boots were full of big feet;
His carved leather belt held pistols and things
And an old deck of cards held aces and kings.

Lovely Juliette sat there feeling remorse
When the dude came in riding on a black horse;
Her loveliness gave him a heart felt glow
And he reigned in his horse with a powerful "Whoa";
Then he turned to the woman with an ecstatic smile
And boldly asked if he could stay awhile.

With flustered mind she blinked eyes in fright
But Juliette smiled and said that he might;
So in through the entrance rode the mysterious dude
With a proud  mind and feeling a bit lewd;
He strode up to the landlord and cleaned out the bar
And the landlord threatened to coat him with tar;
The judge banged his gavel and charged him for same
Then the renegade left and rode off with his dame.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Bickerstaffe Avatar
June 27, 2012 at 7:15 PM
Yippee Ki O!!!!! A marvelous tale of lust in the west! Rich in detail with a happy-go-lucky flow and cheeky rhyming. You should write short stories, or better yet, a novel!! :))
Maverick Avatar
April 18, 2012 at 12:04 PM
Really riding the west through my screen with this one Lizzie.) real concise and flavorful write.."
Situation Avatar
January 27, 2012 at 5:30 PM
this is how i see us.
Bagnall Avatar
November 8, 2011 at 5:23 AM
Lovely little western romp :) Enjoyed the story
Sumler Avatar
October 14, 2011 at 6:41 PM
More adventures please! Some renegade! I see you can write 'em all my friend...from love and stars to the wild wild west! You're truly a versatile writer Liz!
Rams Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 8:27 PM
he rode in on his black horse, but when he left he had a new boss !
Austin Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 5:57 PM
This is one bold dude with his Calamity Jane. Makes me want to hear more of their adventures. Love, daver
Zzzzz Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 3:35 PM
An imaginative and amusing write, Liz. I can see the sun setting as the pair ride off! xoxo Robert.
Maverick Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 2:03 PM
Yes Elizabeth good one here..(and love the word play) will read again..
Martin Avatar
October 12, 2011 at 6:13 PM
I tried commenting on this one yesterday evening (my time/Egypt) but got kicked out and headed for "Dreamsville" instead. I agree with Hussein - Clint Eastwood! Wonderful write Dale Evans...or might you be May West? (LOL):
Effendi Avatar
October 12, 2011 at 4:00 PM
This reminded me of Clint Eastwood, don't know why :) Good one nonetheless
Castro Avatar
October 11, 2011 at 9:19 PM
I am the renegade the rebel I choose my own path I am the waririor the reaper I do it with class 7up as always
Wesley Avatar
October 11, 2011 at 9:24 PM
Do you have big feet?
Kapoor Avatar
October 11, 2011 at 3:29 PM
Nicely crafted story my friend. You have your own unique way of telling a thing and this is really a great quality. Enjoyed reading this lovely funny tale and thank you for your kind and precious comments on my poem "Greetings to America" I have not added anything new. Love and best wishes....Ravindra... elizabeth wesley
Peranteau Avatar
October 11, 2011 at 10:17 AM
Well Elizabeth; ya done rocked my poetic day with this write dear poet ! What a humorous piece my friend ! Have a wonderful week ! Much love, james
Onclaud Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 6:39 PM
SOUP MAIL...
Onclaud Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 5:33 PM
now, this a new angle from you.. very interesting and full of visual plots... sparkling, elize! :) hugggs,nette
Ekpemandu Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 3:46 PM
beautiful piece...extremely beautiful..love this one......love the whole story...nice piece my dear..you never cease to amaze me....
Sadberry Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 2:36 PM
....Smile, *^_^* “Ow Romeo, Romeo, Where Art Thou Romeo??? *^_#* Probably Hanging Out With The Biscuit Somewhere Over The Rainbow Calling Back Unto His Sweeet Juliet *^_^* `Baby, Well, That's All I've Got for Now But, Love The Fact That His Precious Little Heart Got His G*rl, My Dear *^_^* Thanks for The Lovely Com, Sweeet Lizzie &, Wonderfully Creative & Splendid Poe!” === My Love, Always, Jasper! *
Sadberry Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 2:18 PM
Smile, *^_^* “Afore I View Your Beauties Painting My Dear Precious, Gifted & Beautiful Elizabeth! *^_^* I Must Say That for Whatever Unknown Reason When I Saw This Verses Title My Mind Was Filled With Thoughts of, Charlie Brown & The Great Pumpkin Patch *^_^* I Know Tis Somewhat Odd But, I Had Nightmares As A Child After Seeing That Halloweens First Special *^_#* `Trick-O-Treat!?`” === Cont} *
Kendrick Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 1:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your flowing work..Great story with good rhyme and rhythm..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara
Nair Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 11:48 AM
effortless story telling through some splendid lines..enjoyed..
Horne Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 9:57 AM
LOL, what a lovely story : ) You sure have a way with words
Mcknight Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 8:13 AM
Maam, I just wanted to personal, with sincere intent appologize for my late night post which I did revise, Thank you, my mother is 79 years old, I would never ever talk to her like that, and its the same if a lady reads something dirty. please forgive a frustrated girl at this dirty world I've lived in and I myself have been filthy myself. Lucinda re: Journey
Dufresne Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 7:55 AM
haha this one sure grabs the imagination and pulls it into the entertainment mode. Makes one feel like going on with the story on prose. If I didn't have a full plate I'd want to write a similar one myself. Inspiring and entertaining. Thank you for our many encouraging comments on my previous poetry, Elizabeth.
Lane Avatar
October 10, 2011 at 6:41 AM
Now yer talkin' ma'am. Tony
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