the real and the unreal

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A rhymes - is, bliss, Adonis, kiss, miss

B rhymes - tragic, magic

C Kings

D Truths

R Human nature crave for what unreal gave

R for what unreal gave, Human nature crave

ABRACADABRA poetry contest

Emile Pinet sponsored

written 6/07/2024

11 syllables each line checked as advices

A poet paints a leaf greener than it is, a dramatist makes the story more tragic, human nature crave for what unreal gave, ignores reality that may hold more bliss, those large white marble sculptures of long lost kings, are carved to perfection to look Adonis, because a lie often earns more wealth than truth, there is money behind every Judas kiss, pretending gurus con people through magic, for what unreal gave, human nature crave, stay with the real, give false pretences a miss.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/6/2024 6:01:00 PM

Well done and excellent message in this poem

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/6/2024 9:02:00 PM

Wow! Thanks Andrea!! I realise, many live their entire life in a delusional state! :)

Di11y Da11y

Date: 7/6/2024 3:10:00 AM

Great message and extraction of true reality here Krish, well written. I keep meaning to give this form a go. Good luck for the contest. (In the example, were the R lines a reversible double rhyme line?)

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 7/6/2024 3:36:00 AM

Thanks Dilly, not sure about that, shall double check! You are right!! Thanks! I have corrected! hope it is okay now!