Jan Allison Poet Verse

The Proposal

Confide 
I want you for
My bride

Don’t rush …
Think about it 
Lips brush

Caress 
Breathless murmur 
Says YES!

Jan Allison
24th November 2014
Contest: Whispers of a muse
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud
Checked using ‘How many Syllables’ 2, 4, 2
~awarded 4th place~

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John Fleming December 25, 2014 at 10:20 AM Rather sweet poem; nice concept. :) john. Jan Allison December 25, 2014 at 2:54 PM thanks John:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders December 8, 2014 at 8:39 AM That one moment when love, excitement, passion, and hope all come together with that one word...you captured it beautifully, Jan! Congrats to you!! Hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison December 8, 2014 at 10:52 AM Thanks so much Rhonda:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kayod5 Kayode December 6, 2014 at 11:35 PM Nicely done, congrats on the win Jan...huggs Jan Allison December 7, 2014 at 5:12 AM Thanks so much Kayod5 for your lovely comment:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich December 4, 2014 at 7:09 PM gosh this one somehow got away from me and i had never noticed it posted. Was ait posted extra early or late? VERY good one, Jan. So romantic. Congrats. Jan Allison December 4, 2014 at 7:11 PM cant remember when it was posted - glad you found it and enjoyed it that is the main thing:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma December 4, 2014 at 4:18 AM Wow quite a passionate write Jan! Congrats on big win! Jan Allison December 4, 2014 at 4:29 AM Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan x

Hija De La Luna December 4, 2014 at 2:41 AM congratulations, Jan! love it! Jan Allison December 4, 2014 at 4:28 AM Thanks so much Hija:-) Hugs Jan x

Joseph May December 3, 2014 at 10:04 PM beautiful...Congrats on your win Jan Jan Allison December 4, 2014 at 4:28 AM Thanks so much Joseph:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Mohn December 3, 2014 at 7:38 PM Back for congrats Jan...this was one of my favorites Jan Allison December 4, 2014 at 4:27 AM Thanks so much for your lovely comment David:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight December 3, 2014 at 3:01 PM Hi Jan, love your sweet proposal, and especially,"breathless murmur says yes." Congratulations on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison December 3, 2014 at 3:07 PM Thanks so much Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus December 3, 2014 at 10:25 AM Hi Jan...you not only gave this a try, but also came out with flying colours! Congratulations on a well deserved win! // paul Jan Allison December 3, 2014 at 10:43 AM Thanks so much as ever for your continued support:-) Hugs jan xxx

Nette Onclaud December 3, 2014 at 10:09 AM you excite and thrill me with this breathless murmur, jan... thanks for being part of my contest with bright congrats! Jan Allison December 3, 2014 at 10:41 AM Thanks so much Nette:-) Hugs jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne December 3, 2014 at 9:57 AM Oops, I had already Faved it, good for me! Jan Allison December 3, 2014 at 10:41 AM :-) you are too kind my friend:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne December 3, 2014 at 9:55 AM Congratulations on another great win for you. A Fav! Jan Allison December 3, 2014 at 10:40 AM Thanks so much Maurice:-) Hugs Jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans December 3, 2014 at 9:20 AM Dropping back with my congratulations Jan. You have once again risen to the occasion. XXOO Jan Allison December 3, 2014 at 9:21 AM ooh has it been judged - thanks for being barer of good news my friend:-) hugs jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid December 1, 2014 at 5:49 AM truly beautiful pen jan love how it drew for me Jan Allison December 1, 2014 at 7:31 AM Thanks so much for the lovely comment Liam:-) hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux November 26, 2014 at 7:40 AM I am not familiar with the form but I like the piece. Good luck in the contest. Jan Allison November 26, 2014 at 8:22 AM it's one Nette found for us Richard - i love the challenge of the short forms she finds for us:-) hugs jan xxx

Paul Callus November 25, 2014 at 5:20 PM Well done Jan! This is one contest I would like to take part in, but am so busy at the moment; I'll have to write while I sleep! hugs // paul Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 5:25 PM It really is a challenging form Paul but I thought i would give it a try:-) Hugs jan xxx

Rosemond Mensah November 25, 2014 at 12:07 PM Don’t rush … Think about it Lips brush very good poem you are well done Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 12:10 PM Thank you so much for your lovely comment Rosemond:-) hugs jan xx

David Meade November 25, 2014 at 11:12 AM Almost missed this -- it was so quite. It's amazing how whispers make the heart scream for joy!! Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 11:53 AM Thanks so much David I enjoyed the challenge Nette set I hope I have done it correctly:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Yvonne November 25, 2014 at 9:21 AM Let me whisper this in your ear - (i love it) Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 11:53 AM aww thanks you so much Maurice, I am so glad you enjoyed it - it is a challenging form:-) Hugs Jan xx

Hija De La Luna November 25, 2014 at 6:23 AM i enjoyed this, Jan! beautiful! Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 6:35 AM Thanks Hija it's a very challenging form! Hugs jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders November 24, 2014 at 11:52 PM Lovely, Jan! Yours is the first entry I've seen for this contest...you have set the bar high! Hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 1:03 AM I think I was the first one in the contest Rhonda - its a challenging form! Hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong November 24, 2014 at 11:10 PM This one is stellar Jan! I hope it wins BIG! Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 1:03 AM Thanks Connie for the lovely comment:-) Hugs jan x

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis November 24, 2014 at 8:38 PM Jan, Simply beautiful little gems. I anticipated more by virtue of the title; then, surprise! cute 2,4,2 verse. Thanks for taking the time to add your kind comment. Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 1:02 AM Thanks Iris - its the first time I've seen and tried this form and its quite a challenge:-) Hugs jan xx

Brenda Meier-Hans November 24, 2014 at 8:18 PM Well done with so few syllables. Not an easy one but you did it. XOXO Jan Allison November 25, 2014 at 1:01 AM It's really challenging Brenda but I've given it a go:-) Hugs jan xx

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