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The Pathetic Whorelock

PATHETIC WHORELOCK, where in the world do I begin? That "slam" was nothing more than an insult to "your" pen! So, I am the focus of your "DEMONIC STARE," Though your rhymes needed critiquing with a little more care. Slam DOC the Poet?! You could not slam DOCTOR SEUSS! You could never outdo me, so what is the use. I can match you rhyme for rhyme any time that you want, Because that "slam" proved that you have no talent to flaunt. Since you will never win, you need to go find a new game. "LOSER" is the fame, that will be attached to your name. You got beat by just about everyone that you faced, So why brag about some contest, and where you "might" have placed! You seem like the type, who gets off on his own words, Inventing silly phrases that no one has ever heard. You need to conjure up a spell that will give you some skill. If you need inspiration, then please go and read "KILL BILL!" Step up to the curve, or step out of the way. Your ELEMENTARY rhymes sound more like child's play. Calling your style ELEMENTARY is an insult to kids. Soon, you will learn your lesson, just like the Kidster did! Please do not lose focus of your Hocus Pocus HARRY POTTER! I thought you were a challenge. Now, I wonder why I even bothered. Use that electric chair to spark some creative thoughts, Because the next time you "bring it," it better be brought!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 3/17/2011 9:18:00 AM
Doc I didn't know Battles were taking place on here. Tight! This adds a whole new type of flavor to the soup. Sometimes soup gets a little bland and cold. Good that you are heating it up with some spice! ~JS Lambert
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Date: 3/5/2011 4:49:00 PM
Interesting work..Sara
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Date: 3/5/2011 9:42:00 AM
I AM JUST GETTING WARMED UP!
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