Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

The Past I Never Had

“love and darkness and my sidearm”

This line reminds me of youthful rebelliousness
Of summer nights, out with good friends
Driving along, in a car together
Feeling as if we could live forever
No cares, no laws, no responsibilities
Just a love of life and debauchery
When I sing it, I’m there with them
This is my life, and these are my friends
It’s the wonderful past that I never had
That I can live for a minute, both good and yet bad
I’m laughing, loving, wild, and free 
Until the song ends, and with it, the fantasy

Song: The South Side by Moby

7/17/11

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Nette Onclaud July 20, 2011 at 8:03 AM gems of words and phrases lend themsleves well in this offering, susan.. winning wishes to you! :) huggs, nette

Andrea Dietrich July 19, 2011 at 7:12 PM I really like how you did this. Wait till you see mine. It's kinda corny! (waiting to post it because right now, It seems people are not getting hits on their recent poems. too many congrats going around for all the contests. haha. Soupmail)

Dr.Ram Mehta July 19, 2011 at 6:50 PM Nice quote in the beginning that defines the theme of the poem, susan

Sara Kendrick July 19, 2011 at 4:25 PM Enjoyed reading this eve..I do not know this one..Those songs can help us go into that fantasy state..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara

Zzzzz Zzzzz July 19, 2011 at 12:04 PM Interesting write. I particularly like the last line. So many of our fantasies are short-lived! If this is for a contest, I wish you good luck! Love, Robert.