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The Pane of Separation

Outside, other children play.
Inside, something makes me stay, 
a separation I can feel - 
invisible, but no less real.

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Andrea Dietrich

August 15, 2026 at 10:36 PM

Oh sorry. I thought this was your lento for that one contest I saw. If it's not, you are perfectly fine.

David Crandall

August 16, 2026 at 1:33 PM

Yup, I have a separate lento in the works! Thanks for looking out for me though!

Andrea Dietrich

August 15, 2026 at 10:35 PM

I love the message here and the play on pane. I am not sure I would consider your first words as true rhymes. Check with Rhymezone.

David Crandall

August 16, 2026 at 1:32 PM

Thanks, Andrea!

CayCay Godwin

August 15, 2026 at 7:37 PM

Man, every time I return from not being gone you are ROCKING IT even more than before. You were born a poet and someone forgot to tell you, maybe because 'they' didn't think it would be lucrative and wanted you to eat. EXCELLENT ... Oh, and the pun CayCay

David Crandall

August 16, 2026 at 1:32 PM

Thanks, CayCay - haha, yep, not too many men can live on poetry alone!

Pascal Borg

August 8, 2026 at 9:45 PM

A very good write. I tried replacing 'pane' with 'pain', it worked both ways for me. Enjoyed reading it.

David Crandall

August 9, 2026 at 10:38 AM

Thanks, Pascal! Yep, I wanted to give double meaning to pane/pain. The way I pictured the poem is a kid looking out a window at other kids playing and use the window as a sort of metaphor.