The Only Side Is Mine To Give Up

I love you
and I will continue to
even if MY love is forbidden.
Good lord! How much love have I given?
Please forgive me for not giving up.
I know I have to like ASAP.
But I just can’t obviously resist
even with your cold demeanor assist.
Obviously I am so obsessed
but in moving on I’m not the best.
Deep inside I can’t let go
and if I insult, even more so.
I know in the end I will be harmed.
And with stings of love, I’d be swarmed.
But it’s the only way I know to live,
to give your heart and then grieve.
As you can see this may count as love letter.
But soon, I must do better
for there is no good with one-sided love.
Metaphorically, it’s a “one-winged” dove.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 7/25/2016 2:39:00 AM
Big thanks max :), nice meeting you, i thought your'e a guy :) now i have something to write on my lit crit :D, can u speak tagalog? im not really good in speaking english hahahah :D
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Jeric Gregorio
Date: 8/8/2016 7:26:00 PM
:D haaa? grade 10 ka pa pala at nakapagsulat ka na ng poem:) nakakabilib.. i salute you max... Taga saan ka? idadagdag ko to sa authors info :) tnx
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Max Ortiz
Date: 8/8/2016 9:16:00 AM
Grade 10 pa lang po, Rizal.
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Jeric Gregorio
Date: 7/27/2016 4:02:00 AM
hehehe uo pinoy ako taga davao, taga san ka? anung year mo na? wew ako sobrang busy sa school 3 pages ksi dapat ang haba ng criticism na bubuoin ko sa poem na ito,,kailngan ko nang tapusin, medjo mahirap ksi napaka istrikto ng guro namin pagdating sa grammar >,<....
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Max Ortiz
Date: 7/26/2016 7:24:00 AM
Hahahahaha.. of course I can.. Pinoy ka pala?
Date: 7/13/2016 9:44:00 PM
max can i have your profile? because my teacher given me a task to criticize your poem including authors profile.. plsss reply i really need it,, thank you..
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Max Ortiz
Date: 7/20/2016 8:38:00 AM
and please, can you actually criticize me here too using the comment box? Thanks. BTW, I am actually in a one-sided love, if you're wondering what inspired me to write this.
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Max Ortiz
Date: 7/18/2016 11:25:00 PM
My real name is Maxine Ortiz, a regular teenage girl who lives in the Philippines. I only post my poems here in Poetry Soup and Scribd. I never had an award for writing.
Date: 6/27/2016 4:34:00 AM
It is good to write what you feel to keep a perspective. Really like last line. Also good to see Philippine poetry. My wife is from your country. Welcome and regards David from NZ
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Date: 6/23/2016 10:37:00 PM
MAX, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 6/23/2016 10:36:00 PM
nice to read, Max. linda
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Max Ortiz
Date: 6/23/2016 11:04:00 PM
do you mind criticizing my poems? Like what should I improve or something??? Thank you, Linda.
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