The Old Salt and His Sweet Dream

Forth he went upon the sea
grizzled and tough as he could be.

But when the old salt came to shore
he'd look for Jenny Lynn some more.

She was lost from him for years;
he'd shed a bucket of bitter tears.

Dreaming of the day they'd meet
the old man had a heart so sweet.

Someday he would find his daughter.
Till then he'd spend life on the water.


for "Sweet and Salty" contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

A  Avatar
November 7, 2013 at 11:58 AM
Hi Deb*nice* SWEET Or SALTY win................... HUGS ~SKAT~
A   Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 7:25 PM
Deb, Congratulations On your way to xool Sweet & Sour win... always~ Linda aka PD
Onclaud Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 11:28 AM
i love the nostalgic feel of this one, deb..happy cheers to you for your win!..:) huggs
Kendrick Avatar
November 6, 2013 at 8:55 AM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!!Sara
Jones Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 10:51 AM
Oohhhhh....sad...congratulations on your win...
Dietrich Avatar
November 5, 2013 at 7:57 AM
I enjoyed how this poem went a different direction from most of the others. You made it serious and I really liked it . Congrats in my contest.
Chircop Avatar
October 24, 2013 at 6:24 AM
A lovely sweet poem Deb..Lovely!!!
Richards Avatar
October 20, 2013 at 2:23 PM
A tale right out of the old classics! Well done, Deb ! I hope he finds her !!!
Onclaud Avatar
October 18, 2013 at 11:23 AM
my, deb... a song so profound it hits me hard and whoozy... i like how you ended this spectaular piece... fine penning!..:) huggs
Mehta Avatar
October 18, 2013 at 9:52 AM
Heartfelt approach to the theme of the contest, Deb
Sivey Avatar
October 18, 2013 at 12:35 AM
This is a wonderful write, very salty and sweet my friend! I really enjoyed reading how you interwove the two together into your poem, it was very clever! What a fun piece, Great Work!!
Bantawa Avatar
October 18, 2013 at 12:22 AM
nice poem & best of luck.
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace