Premiere Contest WinnerThe Night Had Gone Awry

There was a painting offered as inspiration for this contest.  I'm sorry I'm not able to include it for lack of a premium membership, but I hope I've managed, just a little, to set the scene with imagery.



Moonlight was diffused by a shadowed sky
Thunder hammered with the power of Thor
Sullen clouds released a deluge in downpour
Something about the night had gone awry

There was a flash of lightning;  a blaring scream
With heart wrenching sobs,  a woman wept
Her raven tresses billowed, wild and windswept
She appeared before me as a specter in a dream

I hesitated to call out, in fear she'd run away
but I could not ignore another mournful wail
Her arms were thin and she was ghostly pale
She shivered, trembled, and began to sway 

She was frightened as though chased by death
Words were mumbled, but none of them clear
Her eyes searched the night, panicked with fear
I spoke calmly until she regained her breath

Her last memory was that she had gone to bed
and was having a nightmare about being stalked
Quite a distance from her home, she had walked
when lightning's crackle woke her from dread

I helped her home, sidestepping puddles of mud
She still trembled, not interested in conversation
She thanked me, but I had a moment of hesitation...
The porch light revealed she was covered in blood



August 6, 2020
Be Inspired Poetry Contest
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Goldsmith Avatar
August 17, 2020 at 8:21 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a story/poem and ending. A great write. Enjoy your win and day............
Logan Avatar
August 21, 2020 at 6:37 AM
I'm so happy you liked it. Thanks for your comments, Paula.
Seeker Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 1:10 AM
Poignant! Powerful! Piercing!
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:14 AM
I'm delighted you found it to your liking, Seeker.
Allison Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 3:58 PM
Such intense imagery Jenna I don't need a pic to go with this work, you have an exceptional talent, thanks for sharing this with us:-) Hugs Jan xx
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:13 AM
Thank you so sincerely for your generous thoughts, Jan.
Gondolf Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 12:44 PM
Looks like you have had a good day, I see that you have 2 firsts. Congrats. John
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:12 AM
It was a nice surprise, John. Thanks for your supportive compliments.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 12:24 PM
An intriguing read, Jenna, an 'edge of the seat' gripping interest appropriating words that trailed throughout, necessitating this a FAVE, and my compliments on your trophy win, Aloha! William
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:12 AM
Thanks for the read, comments, and the fave, William.
Watt Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 9:46 AM
Jenna, you so masterfully wove this amazing tale of suspense with a "killer" surprise ending. Great take on the painting, nice to see your muse cut loose and go dark. Hearty congrats on your gold medal win ~ John
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:11 AM
Thank you so much for the encouragement, John.
Radhakrishna Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 7:59 AM
Great write!! Absolutely brilliant. Congrats on your win!
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:11 AM
Thanks, Krish.
Canerdy Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 7:07 AM
CONGRATS on your VERY well-deserved win, Jenna! Janice
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:10 AM
Thank you, Janice.
Koplin Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 6:28 AM
Great poem!! Congratulations on your top win! Well done
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:10 AM
Thanks a lot, Mark.
Mcintosh Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 4:47 AM
Such a stunning and surprising inspiration, dear Jenna! I simply love it. You were definitely inspired! God bless you and congratulations on your win
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:10 AM
Thank you very much, Gina. I'm honored.
Cunningham Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 4:46 AM
Back with congrats Jenna, now about that follow up??????? , your fans are waiting lol
Logan Avatar
August 16, 2020 at 8:09 AM
Thank you, Tom. ummm, I think I'll just let everyone draw there own conclusions. Things are not always as they seem.
Ermine Avatar
August 6, 2020 at 3:15 PM
I like the hang ending. Intended to comment on your poem, because it's very solid. 'Unfelt' rhyme fits beautifully, a really superb write. A winner.
Logan Avatar
August 7, 2020 at 10:28 AM
Thank you, Sigrid. I think I might just let it stand as is.
Gondolf Avatar
August 6, 2020 at 2:31 PM
So, you're gonna make us finish the story for ourselves...what a gripping write, Jenna, it leaves me wanting more, to know why she was covered in blood. Your writing is amazing my friend. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John
Gondolf Avatar
August 6, 2020 at 3:19 PM
I am just giving you a hard time, Jenna. Sometimes it is very effective to leave a story hanging and let the reader draw their own conclusions. You wrote this piece well. :)
Logan Avatar
August 6, 2020 at 2:59 PM
Ok ok. You and Tom are putting a pen in my hand to solve the mystery, so I suppose I'll have to write a follow up with a fitting conclusion...what ever that may be. Thanks, John.
Cunningham Avatar
August 6, 2020 at 2:28 PM
You certainly didn't need a painting Jenna, I could picture it in my mind. Your imagery was stunning. It was like one of those thrillers that has you on the edge of your seat and the front door knocks and you jump out of your skin. Brilliantly written. Tom
Logan Avatar
August 6, 2020 at 2:57 PM
haha This ended up going in a direction I had not planned. My muse took control and before I knew it, she had me mixed up in a bloody mystery. I guess since you and John are giving me a 'need to know' push, I'll have to find a conclusion for this one. I'll let you know when I know. Hugs.
Cunningham Avatar
August 6, 2020 at 2:52 PM
Im with John, we need a follow up.
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