Andrea Dietrich Poet Rhyme

The Much Anticipated Beach Day

Vanished is the sun that had peeked so exuberantly
around the clouds! Our new beach chair that broke sits taunting me.
The castle that our children built (and then declared it grand)
lies unrecognizable, a washout on wet sand.
One tire of our dune buggy is deflated, and I hold
inside my hand a too-warm Coke that once was icy cold.


Feb. 20, 2019 for Nina Parmenter's Reflect That Emotion Poetry Contest

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Ken Rone March 2, 2021 at 8:02 AM RIP Bruce Meyers. Ken Rone March 5, 2021 at 11:01 AM Bruce was the inventor of the Dune Buggy. He passed Monday well into his 90's. Andrea Dietrich March 2, 2021 at 12:36 PM ??

Line Gauthier February 26, 2019 at 3:24 PM Back with more congrats, Andrea.

Line Gauthier February 25, 2019 at 6:45 PM Perfection is for movies. LOL Congrats on your silver medal win, Andrea. Well done.

Andrew Fairchild February 24, 2019 at 1:14 AM Back again with congratulations! I really like this poem!

Jack Webster February 23, 2019 at 9:07 PM Love how rich the concrete details are. Love how they speak for themselves. Congratulations, Andrea!

Susan Ashley February 23, 2019 at 7:39 PM I love how your poem builds on the 'when it rains it pours' phenomenon, when absolutely nothing goes right. A great poem of dashed hope and disappointments, Andrea. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Carolyn Devonshire February 23, 2019 at 10:48 AM In spite of all these things, people still love going to the beach. Well done, Andrea. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, carolyn

P.S. Awtry February 23, 2019 at 10:06 AM Back with congratulations!

Laura Leiser February 23, 2019 at 9:59 AM What a wonderful, entertaining poem on all the mishaps that can happen in a much anticipated beach day! Loved this, Andrea! Congrats on your win! :)

Alexis Y. February 23, 2019 at 9:14 AM Hi Andrea, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your 2nd place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Janice Canerdy February 23, 2019 at 9:12 AM CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Andrea! Janice

Alexis Y. February 22, 2019 at 10:46 PM WoW! Andrea, You did a good job with the contest theme. Isn't that terrible when our day doesn't go as planned? In each stanza the "reflection" was on point! I'm sure I will see you on the winners list. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

Rhona Mcferran February 20, 2019 at 10:36 PM I think we've all had (felt) that kind of day! Great poem, my friend! ;)

Ilene Bauer February 20, 2019 at 3:08 PM ha! you've described that kind of day perfectly, andrea!

Charlie Smith February 20, 2019 at 12:15 PM Not quite the end of a perfect day, always tomorrow, good one Andrea...

Caren Krutsinger February 20, 2019 at 11:33 AM Ah, this is terrific. We have all been there, Andra.

P.S. Awtry February 20, 2019 at 9:47 AM you have reflected disappointment so well that I'm having to cheer myself up! Reads like a winner!

Vijay Pandit February 20, 2019 at 9:06 AM You wrote this well, Andrea..all things that ruined the day very well pictured in your beach scene.

Tom Cunningham February 20, 2019 at 5:01 AM Well written Andrea, you've shown us the way in what Nina is after. Tom.

Connie Marcum Wong February 20, 2019 at 3:09 AM This is great Andie! I wrote one but I think it doesn't have enough props. : )

Andrew Fairchild February 20, 2019 at 2:13 AM This is ingenious! 'One tire of our dune buggy is deflated' -- a good metaphor for the letdown of a to-be-wonderful day that never got there. Good fortune to you in the contest! I like the many-leveled, but easily recognizable emotion that you picked!