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Entry for The Vester Step poetry Contest: Sponsored by: Jami Patterson  Date wrote 29th Jan 26
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The Mouse

A mouse tore across her toes
then, a scream from her, or it
as it scampered up her hose;
did the boy do what was fit?

She coyly looked into his deep, dark eyes
he, glancing at her slightly parted thighs
soft said, " Ma’am, can I be of any aid?”
“It is but a mouse; do not be afraid.”

“It is a rat that I most fear,” she said
“with eyes so dark that see through me,
attack me in my bed,
sir, is that thee”?
“Yes”!
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Patterson Avatar
February 20, 2026 at 8:07 PM
I really enjoyed the pacing of this piece, Terry. The imagery of the mouse scampering up the hose sets a frantic scene, which makes the calm, 'coy' interaction in the second stanza even more impactful. That final question and answer have a wonderful gothic undertone. Very clever storytelling!
Miller Avatar
March 16, 2026 at 4:56 AM
Thank you so much Jami for you so kind comments and for running a really enjoyable contest
Crandall Avatar
February 19, 2026 at 7:34 PM
Haha, interesting situation and repartee!
Miller Avatar
March 16, 2026 at 4:56 AM
Thank you David
Dietrich Avatar
January 31, 2026 at 6:12 PM
Wow. So interesting. Like Sam said, quirky! I like poems like that.
Miller Avatar
March 16, 2026 at 4:56 AM
Thank you Andrea
Kauffman Avatar
January 30, 2026 at 11:41 AM
Quirky and delightful, Terry! So good to see you posting! Love your sense of the absurd! Cheers and blessings!
Miller Avatar
January 31, 2026 at 1:04 AM
Thank you Sam
Godwin Avatar
January 29, 2026 at 7:31 PM
This is clever and delightful; I loved it from start to finish. Haven't read you in a while, I was going thru withdrawals! I'm sure this will engage the sponsor and anyone else who reads it. Wait, that's not true, when it comes to contest, I'm not sure of anything!
Miller Avatar
January 30, 2026 at 3:11 AM
Thank you, CayCay. I appreciate your kind comments. I, too, have not read for a while. I have been so busy, but I did find the time to slip in a couple of poems for irresistible contests. I hear what you say about contests I am never sure, so I use them as prompts and writing exercises.
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