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The Jay and Me

The Jay and Me

Music to my ears:
Tears composed of saltwater
Flow to the ocean.

A grey jay blends in,
Wings of life singing praises,
The cedar its home.

I thank the framer;
Guilt doesn’t gnaw my conscience
Others chop down trees.

I fear death today;
Earth circles the light of life
Sans the jay and me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Roper Avatar
September 21, 2020 at 11:42 AM
great Haikus or Senryus, Dennis. 3rd group middle line one short , but still fantastic.
Roper Avatar
September 21, 2020 at 8:20 PM
Sorry for the comment. my mistake The third stanza has a syllable count of 5 6 5 using "How many syllables" website to count the syllable count. I wasn't sure of the "me" as a person
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September 21, 2020 at 12:12 PM
I appreciate your input Eve. I'm not quite sure I follow. The poem is a Haiku format with 5,7,5 syllable lines conveying a nature setting
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