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This depression got me so low I hope that it won't show Today I will put on the most beautiful smile may this last day be worthwhile I'll meet and greet and be "unknowingly" discreet I'll say hello, hi and that's so sweet Like always I would act as if nothing's wrong This past life will be over before long I have nothing to live for, all hope lost I am a failure, all of THIS at what cost? Not even the dearest around me can see What ugly there is within ME All I hear inside of my head Is I'm weak, I'm worthless, I'm.....*shot goes off* DEAD

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Darren White

Date: 10/3/2017 12:38:00 PM

You could say it's a sonnet, even though the syllable count and cadence doesn't fit. But it is most certainly rhyme. This subject is very close to me, since I suffer from clinical depression with anxiety disorder. This very sensitive subject. I don't know how you feel about it, but why not write in Free Verse? It gives you much more versatility, and there won't be forced rhyme :)