The Flight

raised expansive wings commence synchronized flutter ---begin ascension.

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J Wilton Jones

Date: 2/5/2017 11:37:00 AM

Wow, instead of painting a picture you presented a video! Very nicely done!

Marquis Mc Mills-Cooper

Date: 10/10/2016 4:50:00 AM

Wow, very nice! I have yet to try a Monoku...I'm still working through Haikus LOL! Congratulations on your win with this poem. again...very nice Susan. MC

Susan Palli
Date: 10/13/2016 12:36:00 PM

Thank you!

Dineen Williams Gault

Date: 4/21/2016 7:57:00 AM

Your spot on descriptive line allowed readers to conjure such a beautiful image of flight. Awesome, congratulations!

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 4/12/2016 5:38:00 PM

Congrats Susan, for your first placement in the contest!!! :-)

Susan Palli
Date: 4/23/2016 12:54:00 AM

Thank you, Teddy!

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/10/2016 10:46:00 PM

Susan, Congrats on your Not So Original Monoku Challenge" LINDA

Susan Palli
Date: 4/21/2016 11:07:00 AM

Thank you, Linda!

Charlie Smith

Date: 4/10/2016 8:24:00 AM

Congratulations Susan, very well done...

Susan Palli
Date: 4/10/2016 11:28:00 AM

Thank you, Charlie.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/8/2016 2:01:00 AM

Congratulations Susan on your top win:}

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:11:00 AM

Thanks!

Probir Gupta
Date: 4/8/2016 4:24:00 AM

Great observation for the nice monoku. Congratulations...

Sathya Babu

Date: 4/7/2016 9:51:00 PM

Congrats, Susan on your TOP Win

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:11:00 AM

Thanks!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/7/2016 7:47:00 PM

CONGRATS, Susan. ME LIKEY!

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:11:00 AM

Thanks!

Brian Davey

Date: 4/7/2016 6:52:00 PM

Congrats on your well deserved placement in this contest!

Susan Palli
Date: 4/10/2016 11:28:00 AM

Thank you, Brian.

Laura Leiser

Date: 4/7/2016 3:50:00 PM

Congrats on your creative, top win, Susan :)

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:12:00 AM

Thanks!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/7/2016 2:57:00 PM

Creative work..Way to go with this win..Congrats..Sara

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:12:00 AM

Thanks!

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 4/7/2016 2:50:00 PM

Congratulations Susan

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:12:00 AM

Thanks!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/7/2016 1:52:00 PM

What a vivid visual your line produces in the mind! Beautiful Susan and most deserving of first place! Congratulations! #7 ; )

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:13:00 AM

Thanks!

Paul Callus

Date: 4/7/2016 12:27:00 PM

A very descriptive monoku, Susan! I like that 'synchronized flutter'....and the 'ascension' lifted you to first place! Congratulations! // paul

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:13:00 AM

Thanks for the clever comment!

Anisha Dutta

Date: 4/7/2016 11:52:00 AM

Congrats Susan for the wonderful line to win. Love. Anisha D

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:14:00 AM

Thanks!

Hansteven Selfa

Date: 4/7/2016 9:23:00 AM

That's what I like about you Susan! You write great poems in any form! Congratulations on your spectacular win! I hope to see more of your works in the future! :) -HANS

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:14:00 AM

Thanks!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/7/2016 2:35:00 AM

Wow such a lovely monoku.. no wonder top podium.. big congrats Susan..

Susan Palli
Date: 4/8/2016 11:14:00 AM

Thank you!

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/7/2016 2:31:00 AM

This was a stunning take on my photo, and very much captured the motion and drama of taking flight. Begin ascension indeed. Congrats on your top place win and thanks for participating in my contest!

Susan Palli
Date: 4/7/2016 6:05:00 AM

Thanks so much,Timothy! I am honored that you picked mine. I was motivated to learn to write Monoku and haiku through your contests. So grateful to you!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/3/2016 12:32:00 PM

SO cool. I think you completely captured what was happening.

Susan Palli
Date: 4/10/2016 11:29:00 AM

Thanks Andrea!