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The First Goodbye

laying in your bed
watching you
get dressed
the permanent ring in the
back pocket
of your blue jeans
i’m missing you already

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 9/1/2013 12:07:00 AM
Beautiful, simply beautiful Rachel! This is a great poem about missing your loved one and what you remember most about them! Great poem, keep on writing... I love it. :)
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Date: 7/30/2013 1:24:00 AM
''the permanent ring in the back pocket''.For a certainty that had me thinking.I loved your poem,that line just drew me in.Nicely penned piece.
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Date: 7/30/2013 1:23:00 AM
''the permanent ring in the back pocket''.For a certainty that had me thinking.I loved your poem,that line just drew me in.Nicely penned piece.
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rachel blake
Date: 8/4/2013 10:33:00 AM
Thank you :) im glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 7/30/2013 12:18:00 AM
"Permanent ring in the back pocket", strong line creating a potentially questionable situation. Why is it permanent? This is wonderfully done & daring! :)
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rachel blake
Date: 8/4/2013 10:32:00 AM
Thank you! :) and the permanent ring would be where he keeps his Copenhagen can in his back pocket.