The First Goodbye

laying in your bed
watching you
get dressed
the permanent ring in the
back pocket
of your blue jeans
i’m missing you already
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Boskovski Avatar
September 1, 2013 at 12:07 AM
Beautiful, simply beautiful Rachel! This is a great poem about missing your loved one and what you remember most about them! Great poem, keep on writing... I love it. :)
Mohammed Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 1:24 AM
''the permanent ring in the back pocket''.For a certainty that had me thinking.I loved your poem,that line just drew me in.Nicely penned piece.
Mohammed Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 1:23 AM
''the permanent ring in the back pocket''.For a certainty that had me thinking.I loved your poem,that line just drew me in.Nicely penned piece.
Blake Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 10:33 AM
Thank you :) im glad you enjoyed it.
Tacito Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 12:18 AM
"Permanent ring in the back pocket", strong line creating a potentially questionable situation. Why is it permanent? This is wonderfully done & daring! :)
Blake Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 10:32 AM
Thank you! :) and the permanent ring would be where he keeps his Copenhagen can in his back pocket.
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