The Fall

The darkness of the shadow engulfs the wall, Now is the time to prepare for the fall. I've been here before and I'll come here again When will I learn that I'll never win. The emptiness builds into a dark void Time becomes a blur as I am destroyed. The lies flood my mind and I fall once again, I play the same game knowing I'll lose in the end.

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Skat A

Date: 7/4/2015 11:28:00 PM

Ed, CONGRATULATIONS, on having your poem featured on the soup's home page. Enjoy the coming week. Take Care ~SKAT~

Ed Belcher
Date: 7/10/2015 11:02:00 AM

Thanks Skat!

Cona Adams

Date: 1/22/2015 8:06:00 AM

You've described how I feel when playing solitaire, Ed. I sincerely hope your subject is not about something more serious. I suppose it could apply to many things.

Ed Belcher
Date: 1/24/2015 10:20:00 AM

Thanks Cona. :-) It was covering different kinds of addictions in general, but can be applied to different topics where one feels they continue to lose but keep coming back for the punishment for some reason.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/15/2015 4:19:00 PM

Rhyme is[the general category. The type of end rhyme you used makes your verse a couplet [2]. Nice use of half rhyme as well [void/destroyed] . Light & Love

Ed Belcher
Date: 1/15/2015 6:14:00 PM

Thanks Debbie. This is helpful, I am new to the terminology and styles (other than rhyme and freestyle) so it is good to get some feedback from someone as talented as you. :-)