the empty teacup

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Poetic Form: Senryu
Inspired: 2024 January 25

*2nd Place*
Tea Time
Contest Judged: 2024 February 08
Sponsored by: Natasha L Scragg

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son streams yesterdays lady of those years keeps nigh~ clinking fetch astir son owns two faint eyes lady kept years eyes her son~ silver teaspoon rests son eyes lady's room stopped ~ curio stand lights up son lost eyes to stand silver teaspoon stirs son holds Prince Albert's teacup~ soul sips into tears

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/11/2024 8:34:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your wonderful "Tea Time" write. I enjoyed reading it again... Have a blessed day with a cup of tea.............

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/11/2024 10:20:00 AM

Thanks so much for your return, Paula. Appreciate it a lot, my friend, Aloha, William

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/8/2024 9:21:00 AM

- Thanks for the tea, William ...(give me a cup of coffee instead) ... congratulations on your win in the contest :) -

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/8/2024 10:08:00 AM

Thanks kindly, Anne-Lise, for the early notification, my friend. Aloha, William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/26/2024 9:36:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/a great ending. Have a blessed day writing away......................

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/26/2024 11:06:00 AM

Most grateful, Paula, for being a constant blessings, my friend. Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/26/2024 6:09:00 AM

your title was so appropriate. The last senyru was emotionally powerful 'soul sips into tears.' Wow..enjoyed the read, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/26/2024 7:33:00 AM

Thank you my joyful, Sara. Be your day equal in said joy, my friend. Aloha, William