Notes About The Poem
For: The Empty Room Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Craig Cornish

The Empty Room

In the empty room loneliness sets
the rules in shades of darkest blue;
blue the color of regrets,
and haze of countless cigarettes
through which the past is dimly seen
as phantoms lost in-between 
the projector and the screen,
where relays of surreal dreams,
and jingle of the mind's tambourine,
repeats and beats life's lost vignettes.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Greenhough Avatar
June 4, 2024 at 1:07 PM
This room seems lonely. I like the fascinating rhyme. Good luck with the contest.
Achara Avatar
June 5, 2024 at 3:57 PM
Thank you. Rhyme is a challeng for me, but I do enjoy the challenge.
Bayles Avatar
June 4, 2024 at 8:21 AM
You've done a great job setting up a melancholy scene. I especially like the line, "repeats and beats life's lost vignettes."
Achara Avatar
June 4, 2024 at 9:42 AM
Thank you.
Ashley Avatar
June 3, 2024 at 9:47 PM
Dear Chetta, this is exquisite! Superb imagery and vibrant metaphor conveys a vivid emotive atmosphere of melancholy and regret expressed with poetic beauty and finesse. Truly stunning and inspiring. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Achara Avatar
June 4, 2024 at 9:43 AM
Thank you.
F. Avatar
June 3, 2024 at 5:54 PM
nice write!
Achara Avatar
June 3, 2024 at 5:57 PM
Thank you.
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