Danielle White Poet Rhyme

The Darkness Where I Lie

Witness now the darkening sky,
leaves of autumn darting by,
red so pure, they make me cry,
against the blackness where I lie.

At dusk the sky is oddly lit,
clouds of gray with purple bits,
heavy sky, as I sit,
wondering when my heart will quit.

Morbid thoughts match the scene,
as I against my pillows lean,
in life and death, I'm in between,
the sky, I think, knows what I mean.

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Charmaine Chircop January 29, 2010 at 2:32 PM This poem touched me to the core,,deep indeed,, i need a tishoo..Charma

Sara Lokken December 20, 2009 at 7:44 PM "Red so pure, it makes me cry"....I love that. This is very grief-striken.... Best wishes, Sara

Doris Culverhouse December 18, 2009 at 6:39 PM Don't go gentle into the good night... your poem reminds me of that verse. Good write, keep sharing.

Gerard Keogh Jr. December 16, 2009 at 2:11 PM You should save this as it is a keeper. That last line has resonance, to be sure. Thank you for your kind remarks. They mean a lot to me. Merry Christmas! Gerard

Logan Saucillo December 15, 2009 at 2:49 PM Marvelous. Fantastic. Brilliant. Amazing. Crafty. What else can I say? Other than I could not have said it any better myself. such a great and inspiring write. this poem makes me want to pour out my heart now. thanks for the comments on my poems and that poem you recommended me by A.E. Housman is excellent.

Aleera De La Keur December 14, 2009 at 8:59 PM Great, but sad write. I feel you my uncle just died so I am right there in that in between. Thank you for your comments on my poem being featured last week i appreciate it:)....Aleera

Carolyn Devonshire December 13, 2009 at 2:45 PM Your sad words brought tears to my eyes, Danielle. Keep looking for the light that shines even through those "clouds of gray." Your strength and courage have been an inspiration to me and you are always in my prayers. God bless you with a nice Christmas with your family! Much love to you, dear. Carolyn

Carrie Richards December 13, 2009 at 8:13 AM Wow... This is excellent poetry dear Danielle, ...however, I feel the weariness and darkness overcoming the thoughts of one who lies, looking out into the winter sky with thoughts of futility. I hope the sun comes out soon,....please know thoughts, prayers and good wishes are being sent to you, that soon you will have a healthy life back on track. Take care...lots of hugs, warm thoughts and love. Carrie

Tim Ryerson December 13, 2009 at 7:39 AM Heart wrenching and beautiful, Danielle....turning bad things into good things through poetry...I love it. - Tim

Robert A. Dufresne December 13, 2009 at 5:24 AM Excellent poem Danielle ! Very well written muse. -Robert (by the way, I love your comment on Ken's poem about poet sufferings. hmmm. sounds like you need to expound on this in another excellent poem, don't you think, Danielle? ..or have you already? I'd like to read it if you have.-Robert