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The Darkness Where I Lie

Witness now the darkening sky, leaves of autumn darting by, red so pure, they make me cry, against the blackness where I lie. At dusk the sky is oddly lit, clouds of gray with purple bits, heavy sky, as I sit, wondering when my heart will quit. Morbid thoughts match the scene, as I against my pillows lean, in life and death, I'm in between, the sky, I think, knows what I mean.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 1/29/2010 2:32:00 PM
This poem touched me to the core,,deep indeed,, i need a tishoo..Charma
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Date: 12/20/2009 7:44:00 PM
"Red so pure, it makes me cry"....I love that. This is very grief-striken.... Best wishes, Sara
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Date: 12/18/2009 6:39:00 PM
Don't go gentle into the good night... your poem reminds me of that verse. Good write, keep sharing.
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Date: 12/16/2009 2:11:00 PM
You should save this as it is a keeper. That last line has resonance, to be sure. Thank you for your kind remarks. They mean a lot to me. Merry Christmas! Gerard
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Date: 12/15/2009 2:49:00 PM
Marvelous. Fantastic. Brilliant. Amazing. Crafty. What else can I say? Other than I could not have said it any better myself. such a great and inspiring write. this poem makes me want to pour out my heart now. thanks for the comments on my poems and that poem you recommended me by A.E. Housman is excellent.
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Date: 12/14/2009 8:59:00 PM
Great, but sad write. I feel you my uncle just died so I am right there in that in between. Thank you for your comments on my poem being featured last week i appreciate it:)....Aleera
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Date: 12/13/2009 2:45:00 PM
Your sad words brought tears to my eyes, Danielle. Keep looking for the light that shines even through those "clouds of gray." Your strength and courage have been an inspiration to me and you are always in my prayers. God bless you with a nice Christmas with your family! Much love to you, dear. Carolyn
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Date: 12/13/2009 8:13:00 AM
Wow... This is excellent poetry dear Danielle, ...however, I feel the weariness and darkness overcoming the thoughts of one who lies, looking out into the winter sky with thoughts of futility. I hope the sun comes out soon,....please know thoughts, prayers and good wishes are being sent to you, that soon you will have a healthy life back on track. Take care...lots of hugs, warm thoughts and love. Carrie
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Date: 12/13/2009 7:39:00 AM
Heart wrenching and beautiful, Danielle....turning bad things into good things through poetry...I love it. - Tim
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Date: 12/13/2009 5:24:00 AM
Excellent poem Danielle ! Very well written muse. -Robert (by the way, I love your comment on Ken's poem about poet sufferings. hmmm. sounds like you need to expound on this in another excellent poem, don't you think, Danielle? ..or have you already? I'd like to read it if you have.-Robert
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