Victoria Anderson-Throop Poet Haiku

The Danger of Spring Thunder Clouds Or Nice Guys Finish Last

the danger of spring thunder clouds


                            sunray glimmered love
                            wantonly enticed  darker wilder winds
                            chose thunder-- not me




May 29, 2013
Valdez, Alaska
Victoria Anderson-Throop

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Poet Tacito June 6, 2013 at 7:27 AM Damn, some very strong lines here. Ah, the power of thunder. As with Elai, I believe this is 1 too many for a Haiku. But, either way, this rocked! Poet Tacito June 6, 2013 at 11:58 AM No problem! I'm not overly sensitive about stuff like that. It's silly to do that. The message was clear & poignant here. In the end, that's what matters. :) Victoria Anderson-Throop June 6, 2013 at 10:05 AM thanks Drake...think that in the modern world Haiku can be variable in syllables. originally, I learned it MUST be 1, 3, 1....obviously, that rule is no longer the order of the day....sorry if it was a bother...should never post in the middle of the night either....thanks for reading...Victoria

Elai Cee June 6, 2013 at 6:04 AM good day Victoria i love the imagery here and how it indirectly told the flaming fire of love using the sounds and appearance of nature. But i am confused about the pattern of ur haiku 6/8/6 compare to the original form of Haiku 5/7/5 but anyway this is pretty cool!...keep smiling---ELAI