The Conductor

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Meter - Iambic Pentameter / Cateletic.

Rhyme - AA-BB

A list is kept of every penchant gauged,
Of evil deeds and innocents betrayed.
A guilty sting, a burn beneath their tongue
The knowledge none can hide, for it will come.

It's always there, a blink beyond their view,
Awaiting drifting mist and settled dew.
Translucent in the shadows of the day,
A night wind wings it to a woeful place.

The darkness of a field that has no bounds.
Two tracks of molten steel have purged the ground.
The weeds, ablaze in strips, a rumble rolls.
A train with flaming windows stops to load.

With pleading masses boarded, it embarks
And leaves the smoldered, moonlit field unmarked.
A distant hoot, a nook within a tree,
An Owl, who watched it all, curls down to sleep.


Gene Bourne
06-18-14

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Gene Bourne

Date: 7/18/2014 12:44:00 AM

Did anyone pick-up on the use of the word "gauged" in the first line and railroad tracks which are always a certain "gauge" between between tracks?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2014 3:42:00 PM

Gene, how refreshing it is to see someone post a poem as Iambic pentameter and actually BE a poem in Iambic pentameter. Not a common sight for me here! I appreciate your expertise with meter, and if this is an indication of how you write, I hope to see many more from you!!

Gene Bourne
Date: 6/25/2014 9:47:00 PM

Thanks for the thoughtful comments, Andrea. I'm in the process of reading your poems and find myself captivated by your writing skill, seeming limitless imagination and unique style all your own. You inspire me to compose.....Your PS friend...Gene.