The Commuter

As flowers fill with summer rain
Commuters board their rush hour train 
Oblivious to all they see 
They must get home in time for tea 

Reflecting on their busy day
Decisions seldom go their way
The simple things that mean a lot
Just too busy – Now forgot

Magic times remain unseen
Now blinded by their dull routine
Tomorrows dreams stay in the past
Time flies by - the moments passed 

It’s easy to be lead astray
But every dog will have his day
The thoughts inside – Just Cant let go
So don’t let on -  no-one will know

All heading for another place 
They hide behind a dead pan face 
Afraid their plans have gone astray
They must survive another day

Don’t bother with a crystal ball
You have the power to recall
We each determine our own fate
So take control – Don’t sit and wait

Why stand in line and wait your turn
Just cut the ropes and watch them burn
Feelings that we all suppress
You never know – Perhaps they’ve guessed

The sands of time will ebb and flow
The tree that grows will always show
The promise of a future dawn
On platform nine you stand and yawn.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 4/27/2025 5:44:00 AM
Ken is right Andy...Could visualize it all. Great cadence and rhyme.
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Andy Hunter
Date: 8/27/2025 3:20:00 PM
Thanks Jerry, your comment means a lot.
Date: 5/2/2021 8:50:00 AM
Wow...your first or your first submission in The Soup. I was there with you. Gazing up the track time passed slowly. Thank you! Ken
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Date: 5/31/2021 11:42:00 AM
Thanks for your feedback Ken. Really appreciated
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