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Eye-opening, the chest. Ears attentive. Is there any way to escape his fate?

No walls beat; it is the heart within my own chest. Turn the key; open wide; you look a bit distressed. The pulse inside my own chest, a throbbing mess. Pick it up; won’t you massage it with finesse? Your lips are red and trembling dear; say something. Something seems to be amiss from your wan coloring. Surely you recall when you broke it; I saved it, Just so we might stroll heart to heart into the pit. Dear, don’t look so dully afraid; turn the music key; It’s our song. You don’t recall our breakup melody? I know the heart looks cruelly bruised and irregular; for a regular guy who’s tender, isn’t it spectacular? I know you’d curse, if your lips weren’t burning blue. Poor baby, it gets worse, you’re invited to a barbeque.

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Date: 3/14/2025 5:51:00 AM
A veritable trove; or chest? Of suggestion seems To fit? What will you cook up next? Come to think on it.'
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/14/2025 7:11:00 AM
hmm…plotting with my fingers…lol. Hugs
Date: 3/13/2025 11:43:00 PM
This is a bit dark, but very well written. Scary, the dark side of heartbreak.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/14/2025 7:14:00 AM
Better to forgive, however some heartbreak must put one on the brink of madness, when you didn’t see the betrayal coming. Still, that forgiveness might put one on a level nearest God. Hugs
Date: 3/13/2025 11:52:00 AM
Hi Kim - what a poem with heartbreak qualities - a darker side of you depicted - excellent poetry - real talent shown! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/14/2025 7:17:00 AM
Well, I don’t know of me…I read Daniel’s dark write and was inspired, and likewise by Poe. Hugs and blessings! To letting go of any bitterness, cleaving to forgiveness…best leave vengeance to God.
Date: 3/12/2025 7:06:00 PM
'Heartbreak Hotel's' got nothing on this one. A stunner, Kim!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2025 8:55:00 PM
Thank you, my friend!
Date: 3/12/2025 2:35:00 PM
Your superb poem can be added to the list of so many songs, books and movies depicting the deep sorrow of a heart broken and discarded with a cavalier attitude--very moving, Robert
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2025 8:56:00 PM
Thank you, Robert! I appreciate that!
Date: 3/12/2025 4:09:00 AM
Quite a sarcastic poem, Kim:) well written:)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2025 5:21:00 AM
Thank you, Joanna! Read one of Daniel Henry Rodgers poems, with a dark tone. I also wanted to write a couplet. Hugs :)
Date: 3/11/2025 11:52:00 PM
Interesting poem Kim. Like that ending
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2025 4:01:00 AM
Thank you, Oliver!
Date: 3/11/2025 10:59:00 PM
Oh my. That ending!! Sure interesting though.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/12/2025 4:01:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea!

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