The Apple of Our Eyes

Yessss.. I know there is a whole orchard,
But why do you linger here?
Why are you so tortured?
I’ll tell you why, my dear…

You ssee I know these thingsss,
as you would too..
If you had my wingsss.
Just look at it…Tasste it.. 

Ssuch a lusciousss  fruit! 
What is your fear? 
You are very assstute
Good eye, my dear.

The reason here is quite clear.
You are worried about obedience,
to the all powerful maker,
Such a total inconvenienccce!

A total heart breaker !
You are quite wise enough to ssssee.
And bes-sidesss…you know better,
Why not eat from thissss tree?

An innocccent longing and you must curb it..
Why worry about it? You DESSERVE it! Go ahead. It’ll be jusssssst fine!
Don’t worry about the man with you…
He‘ll allow it…Your MAKER gave you his rib... but he hass no ssspine.

My you are lovely today,
And so very WORTH it,
What do you say?
Nice thought. Nurse it.

Besssidesss,  Adam’s such a clod…
And if you eat this lusscioussss apple,
You’ll be in just like God!
There ya go! Atta girl! Small ssample..

Now talk Adam into a bite of the same,
You’re already stronger!
It’ll be easssy. He isss  ssssso lame!
Don’t wait any longer!

Hahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!
Now you BOTH can’t see the forest for the trees!!
Hahahahahahahahah!
Why are you idiotss looking for leaves?!!!

WOOPS! Here “HE” comes!  Sssorry, wish I could ssstay!
Have a nicccccce day!!  Hahahahahahah!   (exit Eden)


{not elibible for her contest but inspired by Carol Brown and her 
Apples, oranges contest. Thank you Carol.)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 6/26/2011 4:08:00 PM
Behind every successful man....... Yeah Right! Fun Poem. Vince
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Date: 5/26/2011 9:18:00 PM
This was really fun to read, Robert. Some very cute lines!! adam's such a clod. hahaha
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Date: 5/26/2011 1:25:00 PM
Thanks for your comment, Rob. Tomorrow night I leave for my fishing vacation and will be gone about a week. I'm taking my contest entries so the captain of the charter fishing boat can read them and tell me which ones he likes. Have a great Memorial Day weekend! I'll be gone about a week. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/24/2011 9:06:00 PM
Oooh, I can really hear that serpent hissing, Rob. What a great and witty way to tell the story of the Garden of Eden. Wish you could enter it in the contest -- yes, I know the form is different, but the content here is outstanding. Great poem from a very talented writer! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/24/2011 1:58:00 PM
What a pity this isn't eligible for Carol's contest, Robert - great write.
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Date: 5/24/2011 9:07:00 AM
We are the Apple of His Eye Robert and this one is so unique in content and very expressive ..luv that last line my friend.. Carol has inspired u to write greatness luv..
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Date: 5/24/2011 6:46:00 AM
this is a very interesting poem very well crafted. Very very eloquent !
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