Daniel Cheeseman Poet I do not know?

That Sounds Better

“ I'm gonna love you till the morning
comes “
“ Till the morning comes “
“ I'm gonna love you till the morning 
comes “
“ Till the morning comes “

No! no! So wrong

“ I'm gonna love you till the end of
time “
“ Till the end of time “
“ I'm gonna love you till the end of
time “
“ Till the end of time “

Now that sounds better

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Allie Lusha March 30, 2010 at 4:18 AM "I'm gonna love your poetry forever!" ...Always Allie

Bathsheba Bathsheba March 28, 2010 at 5:12 AM Now that does sound better lol - Thanks for a fab share Daniel -:)

Poet Destroyer A March 27, 2010 at 2:55 PM Bothlines sound good to me. Nicely

Sara Kendrick March 27, 2010 at 6:24 AM Yes! That would be a better line..Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara