JC Brul Poet Senryu

Teardrops

Teardrops I hold on; 
                                Warm as a dying ember, 
                                    as I watch you go. 



Honorable Mention
BRIAN'S select E,any form,any theme
Contest Judged:  6/12/2020 11:17:00 PM
Sponsored by: Brian Strand

Entered for "Grief Poetry Contest"
Sponsored by Line Gauthier

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Sam Kauffman April 29, 2021 at 11:26 AM Beautifully stated JCB - "warm as a dying ember" is a superb line - so full of depth and profound meaning. Congratulations on your win!

Marilene Evans April 27, 2021 at 8:36 PM short; but so touching. Congrats.

Line Gauthier March 21, 2021 at 8:38 PM touching ~

James Inman May 16, 2020 at 1:17 AM Leaves one wondering about the relationship. This is a poem that allows the reader to fill in the blanks and relate to it through their own experiences. A characteristic I enjoy in poetry.

Richard Lamoureux May 12, 2020 at 8:06 AM This is sad, where did he or she go?

Silent One April 30, 2020 at 1:50 PM This is brilliant... Rumi said goodbyes are only for those who love with their eyes, for those who love with their heart, there is no such thing as goodbye.

Funom Makama April 30, 2020 at 12:39 AM Fascinating lines.. This is awesome, so awesome.

Kim Rodrigues April 27, 2020 at 9:30 AM This could be several things...you catch each of us in our individual griefs. Nicely done!

Demetrios Trifiatis April 27, 2020 at 4:33 AM Touching dearest, JCB. A real pearl!

John Gondolf April 20, 2020 at 11:22 AM I can feel the deep emotion in this senryu, JCB, nicely penned. John

Jc Hawkens April 19, 2020 at 6:37 AM Beautiful sentiment in your few lines. I've known this pain ,and you convey it well.

Andrea Dietrich April 18, 2020 at 2:08 PM warm tears, such an interesting image, JCB I do enjoy your poetry.

Paul Callus April 18, 2020 at 11:45 AM Your words bring to mind a final farewell, JCB. Tears are meant to flow, thus relieving the strong emotions which mount within. ~ Regards // paul

John Watt April 17, 2020 at 12:18 PM Touching and heartfelt. Most readers will know this pain. Thank you for sharing.

Gershon Wolf April 16, 2020 at 10:04 PM Teardrops can burn (out) too. Nicely penned. :) Gershon

Caren Krutsinger April 16, 2020 at 8:06 PM Gentle and wise. Brilliant.

Quoth Theraven April 16, 2020 at 8:42 AM JCB, Very nice Haiku. The teardrops always disappear in the rain. -Richard

Harry Horsman April 16, 2020 at 1:53 AM Could this be about a memory? Awesome Senryu, really has one thinking... JC Brul April 16, 2020 at 2:11 AM hello dear poet Harry. Yes, about memory. Thank you for your warm appreciation.